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- Are you struggling to write your physician assistant personal statement?
- Are you out of ideas, or just need a second opinion?
- Do you want an essay that expresses who you truly are and grabs the reader's attention in the required 5,000-character limit?
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I have written countless times on this blog about the importance of your personal statement in the PA school application process. Beyond the well-established metrics (GPA, HCE/PCE hours, requisite coursework, etc.), the personal statement is the most crucial aspect of your application.
This is your time to express yourself, show your creativity, skills, and background, and make a memorable impression in seconds. This will be your only chance, so you must get it right the first time.
For some time, I had been dreaming about starting a physician assistant personal statement collaborative.
A place where PA school applicants like yourself can post their PA school essays and receive honest, constructive feedback followed by an acceptance letter to the PA school of your choice!
I have been reviewing a ton of essays recently, so many in fact that I can no longer do this on my own.
To solve this problem, I have assembled a team of professional writers, editors, and PA school admissions specialists who worked to revise and perfect my PA school application essay.
Beth Eakman has taught college writing and worked as a professional writer and editor since the late 1990s. Her projects have involved a wide range of disciplines and media, from editing technical reports to scriptwriting for the PBS Kids show Super Why! Her writing has appeared in publications including Brain, Child Magazine, New York Family Magazine, and Austin Family Magazine. Beth lives with her family just outside Austin, Texas. She is driven to help each client tell the best version of their story and achieve their dream of becoming a physician assistant.
Deanna Matzen is an author with articles featured in Earth Letter, Health Beats, Northwest Science & Technology, and the Transactions of the American Fisheries Society. With an early career in environmental science, she developed a solid foundation in technical writing. Her communication skills were further honed by producing and editing content for a non-profit website, blog, and quarterly journal. Inspired to extend her craft, she obtained a certificate in literary fiction, which she draws on to build vibrant scenes that bring stories to life. Deanna loves working with pre-PAs who are on the cusp of new beginnings to find their unique story and tell it confidently.
Carly Hallman is a professional writer and editor with a B.A. in English Writing and Rhetoric (summa cum laude) from St. Edward's University in Austin, Texas. She has worked as a curriculum developer, English teacher, and study abroad coordinator in Beijing, China, where she moved in 2011. In college, she was a Gilman Scholar and worked as a staff editor for her university's academic journal. Her first novel, Year of the Goose, was published in 2015, and her first memoir is forthcoming from Little A Books. Her essays and creative writing have appeared in The L.A. Review of Books, The Guardian, LitHub, and Identity Theory, among other publications.
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We Work as a Team
Our team of professional editors is wonderful at cutting out the "fluff" that makes an essay lose focus and sets people over the 5,000-character limit. Their advice is always spot-on.
Sue, Sarah, and Carly are amazingly creative writers who will take your "ordinary" and turn it into entirely extraordinary.
I mean it when I say this service is one-of-a-kind! We have spent countless hours interviewing PA School admissions directors and faculty from across the country to find out exactly what it is they are looking for in your personal statement.
We even wrote a book about it.
To collaborate, we use Google Drive. Google Drive is free, has an intuitive interface with integrated live comments in the sidebar, the ability to have a real-time chat, to collaborate effortlessly, and to compare, revise, or restore revisions on the fly. Google Drive also has an excellent mobile app that will allow you to make edits on the go!
Our team has worked with hundreds of PA school applicants within the Google Drive environment, and we have had enormous success.
The Physician Assistant Essay and Personal Statement Collaborative
I have set up two options that I hope will offer everyone a chance to participate:
- One-of-a-kind, confidential, paid personal statement review service
- A collaborative, free one (in the comments section)
Private, One-On-One Personal Statement Review Service
If you are interested in the paid service, you may choose your plan below.
The Personal Statement Review Service is:
- Behind closed doors within a private, secure network using Google Drive.
- It is completely interactive, meaning we will be able to provide real-time comments and corrections using the Google Drive interface.
- Telephone consultations are included with all edits above the single edit level. It’s often hard to communicate exactly what you want hundreds of miles away; for this reason, we offer the option to edit right along with us over the telephone while sharing in real-time over Google Drive. This is an option available to all our paid clients who purchase above the single edit level.
- We provide both revision and editing of all essays. What’s the difference? See below
- We will provide feedback, advice, and help with brainstorming and topic creation if you would like.
- We will help with a “final touch-up” before the big day, just in case your essay needs a few minor changes.
Why Choose Our Service?
- It’s not our opinion that matters. We have gone the extra step and personally interviewed PA school administrators from across the US to find out exactly what they think makes a personal statement exceptional.
- We are a team of PAs and professional writers having worked over seven years with PA school applicants like yourself, providing countless hours of one-on-one editing and revision.
- Our clients receive interviews, and many go on to receive acceptance into their PA School of choice.
Because we always give 100%, we will open the essay collaborative for a limited number of applicants each month and then close this depending on the amount of editing that needs to be done and the time that is available.
Our goal is not quantity but quality. We want only serious applicants who are serious about getting into PA school.
Writing is not a tool like a piece of software but more like how a photograph can capture your mood. It’s more like art. The process of developing a unique, memorable personal statement is time-intensive, and it takes hours to compose, edit, finalize, and personalize an essay.
As Antoinette Bosco once said:
And this is why I am charging for this service. We love helping people find stories that define their lives, and we love helping individuals who have the passion to achieve their dreams. It’s hard to describe the feeling I get when an applicant writes back to tell me they were accepted into PA school.
There is no price tag I can place on this; it’s the feeling we get when we help another human being. It’s just like providing health care. But this takes time.
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Post your essay in the comments section for a free critique
We want to make this opportunity available to everyone who would like help with their essay, and that is why we are offering free, limited feedback on the blog.
You post your essay in the comments section, and you will get our critique. It is that easy. We will try to give feedback to every single person who posts their COMPLETE essay here on this blog post in the comments section.
Also, by posting your comment, we reserve the right to use your essay.
We will provide feedback on essays that are complete and fit the CASPA requirements (View CASPA requirements here). We will not provide feedback on partial essays or review opening or closing statements. Your essay will be on a public platform, which has both its benefits and some obvious drawbacks. The feedback is limited, but we will try to help in any way we can.
Note: Comment Rules: Remember what Fonzie was like? Cool. That’s how we’re gonna be — cool. Critical is fine, but if you’re rude, I will delete your stuff. Otherwise, have fun, and thanks for adding to the conversation! And this should go without saying: if you feel the need to plagiarize someone else’s content, you do not deserve to go to PA school.
* Also, depending on the time of year, it may take me several weeks to reply!
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How to submit your essay for the paid service
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After you have submitted your payment, you will be redirected to the submissions page, where you can send us your essay as well as any special instructions. We will contact you immediately upon receipt of your payment and essay so we may begin work right away.
Pricing is as follows:
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All credit card payments are processed via PayPal over a secure HTTPS server. Once your payment is processed, you will be immediately redirected back to the essay submission page. There, you will submit your essay along with some biographical info and all suggestions or comments you choose to provide. You will receive immediate confirmation that your essay has been securely transmitted as well as your personal copy of "How to Write Your Physician Assistant Personal Statement." Contact [email protected] if you have any questions, comments, or problems - I am available 24/7.
The hourly service includes your original edit and one-on-one time over Google Drive. It is simple to add more time if necessary, but you may be surprised at what a difference just a single edit can make. We find our four-hour service to be the most effective in terms of time for follow-up and full collaboration. We are open to reduced-rate add-ons to suit your individual needs.
Writing and Revision
All writing benefits from rewriting when done well.
When you are in the process of writing a draft of an essay, you should be thinking first about revision, not editing.
What’s the difference?
Revision refers to the substantial changing of text. For example, it may include re-organizing ideas and paragraphs, providing additional examples or information, and rewriting a conclusion for clarity.
Editing, on the other hand, refers to correcting mistakes in spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
On all submissions, we perform both revision and editing.
How to submit your PA school essay for the FREE editing service
Follow the rules above and get to work below in the comments section. I look forward to reading all your essay submissions.
- Stephen Pasquini PA-C
View all posts in this series
- How to Write the Perfect Physician Assistant School Application Essay
- The Physician Assistant Essay and Personal Statement Collaborative
- Do You Recognize These 7 Common Mistakes in Your Personal Statement?
- 7 Essays in 7 Days: PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 1, “A PA Changed My Life”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 2, “I Want to Move Towards the Forefront of Patient Care”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 3, “She Smiled, Said “Gracias!” and Gave me a Big Hug”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 4, “I Have Gained so Much Experience by Working With Patients”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 5, “Then Reach, my Son, and Lift Your People up With You”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 6, “That First Day in Surgery was the First Day of the Rest of my Life”
- PA Personal Statement Workshop: Essay 7, “I Want to Take People From Dying to Living, I Want to Get Them Down From the Cliff.”
- Physician Assistant Personal Statement Workshop: “To say I was an accident-prone child is an understatement”
- 9 Simple Steps to Avoid Silly Spelling and Grammar Goofs in Your PA School Personel Statement
- 5 Tips to Get you Started on Your Personal Essay (and why you should do it now)
- How to Write Your Physician Assistant Personal Statement The Book!
- How to Write “Physician Assistant” The Definitive PA Grammar Guide
- 101 PA School Admissions Essays: The Book!
- 5 Things I’ve Learned Going Into My Fourth Physician Assistant Application Cycle
- 7 Tips for Addressing Shortcomings in Your PA School Personal Statement
- The #1 Mistake PRE-PAs Make on Their Personal Statement
- The Ultimate PA School Personal Statement Starter Kit
- The Ultimate Guide to CASPA Character and Space Limits
- 10 Questions Every PA School Personal Statement Must Answer
- 5 PA School Essays That Got These Pre-PAs Accepted Into PA School
- 7 Questions to Ask Yourself While Writing Your PA School Personal Statement
- 101 PA School Applicants Answer: What’s Your Greatest Strength?
- 12 Secrets to Writing an Irresistible PA School Personal Statement
- 7 Rules You Must Follow While Writing Your PA School Essay
- You Have 625 Words and 2.5 Minutes to Get Into PA School: Use Them Wisely
- What’s Your #1 Personal Statement Struggle?
- 31 (NEW) CASPA PA School Personal Statement Examples
- How to Prepare for Your PA School Interview Day Essay
- Should You Write Physician Associate or Physician Assistant on Your PA School Essay?
- Meet the World’s Sexiest PA School Applicants
- PA School Reapplicants: How to Rewrite Your PA School Essay for Guaranteed Success
- How to Write a Personal Statement Intro that Readers Want to Read
- PA School Reapplicant Personal Statement Checklist
- How to Deal with Bad News in Your Personal Statement
- Inside Out: How to use Pixar’s Rules of Storytelling to Improve your PA Personal Statement
- Ratatouille: A Pixar Recipe for PA School Personal Statement Success
- Personal Statement Panel Review (Replay)
- Mind Mapping: A Tool for Personal Statements, Supplemental Essays, and Interviews
- Start at the End: Advice for your PA School Personal Statement
Brooke Smiley says
Hello! I just finished the first draft of my personal statement, and I would love some feedback. Anything helps(:
If I have learned one thing from working in patient care, it’s that people are lonely. Everyday, I greet a patient, and I can tell they have not seen anyone smile yet that day. My immediate impulse is to smile as wide as I can. I ask them how their morning is, and say their name after I tell them it’s nice to meet them. I believe something as simple as saying a patient’s name is enough to make them feel seen. It’s enough to make someone who has potentially many concerns and anxieties about their health feel as though they are not alone. As providers, the ability to make others feel validated and supported is imperative. An empathetic provider is one who practices good medicine. Medicine is not only about human biology, it is about the entirety of the human experience.
During my time as a caregiver, I discovered a gentleness in myself I had not seen before. Those who know me well may describe me as kind or empathetic. My nature has always been outgoing and curious. I have a voice that carries and an unwavering confidence behind everything that I do. However, as a caregiver, a new aspect of my personality came to light. I found myself in a state of calmness during my shifts. I became a better sympathizer and my capacity for patience grew substantially. I spent more time listening to the patients, even when their words did not make any sense. I learned to focus on my tone and body language as the patients in the memory care unit were often defensive and easily agitated due to their illness. In doing the difficult tasks of cleaning and caring for elderly dementia patients, I was fulfilled by the selflessness of the work I was doing. I knew that I was helping someone’s mother or husband. I left every shift feeling like what I had done that day mattered, regardless of the emotional weight it put on me.
When I reflect on my time as a medical assistant, it becomes apparent to me how different it is from being a caregiver. As a medical assistant, one is expected to not only be kind and considerate to patients, but also mediate situations in which emotions can be tense. When someone’s health is in question, it is easy for them to become irrational and emotional. I have learned how to function as a sounding board for patients when they need someone to appease their anxieties and offer them educated advice on how to approach their health with an open mind and an optimistic attitude. While I use the skills I learned as a caretaker in my career as a medical assistant, I have also learned new ways to stand up for myself and the provider I work for. While medicine requires one to have empathy, it equally requires strength and confidence. Having direct patient interaction with different types of people everyday has taught me how to navigate difficult conversations and unkind words in a way I never thought I would be able to do. I have learned to keep my composure and remain kind, even when a patient may not be giving me the same courtesy.
I contain all of the aspects of what a medical provider should be. I am gentle and calming, yet sure of myself and my abilities. I can bring humor into a room, but still remain sensitive to a patient’s concerns and feelings. I am approachable and understanding while still willing to give honest advice. I crave direct contact and conversation with other people to fill me up. I believe that human relationships are what makes life worth living. I want to live everyday as a confidant and an advocate for health. I want to be a physician’s assistant more than anything, and I know that I will make an honest provider who practices medicine with justice and morality. I will place the patient’s needs first while still allowing them to be in control of their own health.
Lun says
The first time I thought I had seen an angel was when my family lived in Malaysia to escape religious persecution from the country of Myanmar. Here, mom had to get an emergency appendectomy and this became a pivotal moment in my career aspirations. Though we were filled with anxiety and unrest because of our limited knowledge of medicine, I felt a sense of peace with her medical providers. Despite the language and cultural barriers, the determination and kindness of the medical professionals did not cease. As a little girl, I wanted to be like those hero-like figures who went above and beyond to care for my mom.
Upon moving to the United States, my family did not know any English and this brought challenges in our new life. In the early years of our resettlement, doctor visits took up a lot of our time. I quickly noticed the gap in culture and language, especially the way it impacted the quality of healthcare. Such a gap existed that my parents could not communicate their health concerns as clearly as they wanted. At just nine years old, I started translating for my parents at doctors’ appointments but it was difficult knowing that I could not explain the depth of their maladies. The challenging nature of the situation often led to us leaving many appointments without a thorough diagnosis or treatment. Each visit seemed to leave us with more drugs, more frustration, and less hope.
Although I was grateful for vast opportunities of medical care, growing up in rural Gettysburg, I became aware of the effects of the gap in culture and language in patient-provider interactions. Though we had the ease of access to healthcare in our new life, we were not able to utilize this new privilege to its full capacity. The lack of shared life experiences between my family and the doctors we saw further widened the ability to relate and to be understood by them. Early on, I recognized that if I wanted to break these barriers, I would need to rise to the occasion to represent Zomi Burmese Americans and minorities alike within the medical field.
From a young age, I worked hard in school and eventually pursued a degree in biological sciences at the University of Pittsburgh. I knew this would be the doorway into the medical field, though I was unsure of what kind of career I wanted. This became clear to me as I discovered the Physician Assistant (PA) profession through my advisor my freshman year of college. Moreover, as I worked diverse patient care jobs, I found confirmation pursuing a career as a Physician Assistant. As I worked alongside PA’s in the field of emergency medicine and dermatology, I grew to admire the ways their role differentiated them from other healthcare providers. I appreciated the diversity of specialities that PAs were able to work in and the flexibility to curate a challenging yet meaningful career. Knowing that as a PA I could adapt in ways to help to meet dynamic healthcare needs is encouraging. Furthermore, in the dermatology clinic, I observed the ample patient contact that PAs are able to have which allowed them to build meaningful relationships with their patients. This opportunity to invest in patients beyond medical care is what I believe is key to bridging the gap I once saw in healthcare as a young girl.
When I think about myself as a PA in the future, I’m brought back to the doctor’s office. As I walk into the exam room, I see a little girl and her mother smiling up at me as they sit closely next to each other. I can tell that there is much hope in their smiles and my heart softens at the familiarity of the situation. I smile at the joy of knowing that I have been prepared for moments like this, and I am curious to hear their story. My multicultural identity and upbringing has taught me to be adaptable to changes, resilient in trials and empathetic in suffering. Having endured through adversity and the challenges of immigration, I know that investing in my education to be a PA is an investment to the medical care of minority and immigrant groups.
Bri says
Hello! I’ve just finished the first draft of my personal statement so it is very rough. I would appreciate any suggestions on what I can do improve and if it is engaging or not. Thank you for help and I appreciate any and all suggestions!
I wish I could say I always knew what I wished to be when I grew up. The question always seemed so trivial and out of reach from my thinking. It worried me that I did not have all the answers for my future endeavors as in my assignments. I had naturally gravitated towards human biology, and thus healthcare. Yet, I continuously had trouble finding my place. It was not until I dove in that I realized that the reason behind my uncertainty was due to lack of exposure. Embarking as a Certified Nursing Assistant (CNA) and medical scribe/medical assistant (MA) provided me with the valuable opportunity to intimately observe and collaborate cohesively with several incredible medical professionals in their element. Their thinking process for the betterment of the patient was all at my disposal to learn from. From the common cold to near death due to anaphylaxis shock, I have realized that in healthcare, it is a hard concept to grasp when something incomprehensible is happening to your own body. It is when someone gazes at you tearfully, begging for help and longing for clarity as their mind is conjuring the worst scenario possible. But it is also when someone comes in the room to take charge and assure you that everything is going to be okay with a ready-made plan of care, that you receive your “Aha” moment. My once unanswered question had become clear. This and other irreplaceable interactions solidified my decision to become a Physician Assistant as I craved to be the person to make sense of what did not.
Throughout my experience, the PA career with its philosophy rooted in the medical model has continuously captured my attention. My current work mirrors the nursing model and while I have immensely enjoyed forming connections with the patients, my ultimate desire lies in the frontlines of patient care in a greater role. Being a PA allows for a provider-patient relationship where I can solely focus on their care and treatment plan. This suits my personality greatly as I would prefer getting to the cause and using my knowledge to find the desired answer. I found myself longing to provide the diagnosis and be a teacher of the body so that my patients would be properly informed. With rigorous investigation of medical history, lab findings, symptom assessment, and more, I can direct the plan of care in the proper direction.
Here in my journey, my mind wrestled with PA and MD. Further research into the PA profession as well as observing both professions has led PAs to become the ultimate winner. Lateral mobility and the continuous learning of the profession were an aspect I immensely admired. I thoroughly enjoy growing in my education, so this allows me the constant reassurance that my mind will continuously be stimulated by ongoing learning and not become still. Horizontal career flexibility provides knowledge in a wide spectrum of specialties within the medical profession. This grants me the opportunity to move across specialties to continuously grow intellectually. This appeals to me as someone who strives to learn, and this profession allows the promise of lifelong education. To achieve my goals, it would benefit me to embark on the PA education to allow me to readily serve in the medical profession promptly and still grant me the long-lasting impact I yearn to have on my patients and their care without the additional focus on departmental tasks.
While shadowing, I have learned how valuable resources PAs are to the care team. I have found myself appreciating the level of responsibility and autonomy that PAs have on a day-to-day basis. As mid-level providers, PAs improve the timing and quality of care by being another source who are well-trained and knowledgeable in their respective areas. I have come to value the team-centered care the professions pride itself in. While I will have the opportunity of independence, there will be room for collaboration with a physician to properly reach the intended plan of care for the patient at hand. Furthermore, PAs increase access to care. As an Afro-Caribbean woman, this pleases me as we are often overlooked. As a PA, I will work to protect and serve my communities to ensure that they have access to the best quality of care that other communities receive.
It is safe to say that many people want a career that is not only enjoyable, but fulfilling, and by becoming a PA, I will have the best of both worlds. It is no secret that pursuing a career in medicine will be the hardest challenge I have yet to face, but I certainly do not doubt that with perseverance and dedication to the profession and patients, I will prosper. So yes, I had once wished I had known what I wanted to be when I grew up. But now, as I embark on my journey into the world, I can confidently announce that I will become a PA to create my mark in the health professional world and provide clarity for others unknown.
Whitney Prosperi says
Bri,
Your desire to help patients shines throughout your essay. I suggest removing the language about not being sure what you wanted to be when you grew up and jumping straight into your professional journey. Spotlight some of your work thus far, including clinical skills and medical knowledge gained, and then move into your comments about wanting to do more for patients. Likewise, I suggest removing the discussion about PA/MD so you have more characters available to describe your journey toward the PA path.
Also, I recommend describing a patient-care interaction that spotlights some of your skills in action and shows your ability to connect with a patient personally.
You may want to describe a particular interaction that solidified your decision in your paragraph about shadowing.
Lastly, physician assistant is not capitalized unless it begins a sentence. 🙂
Remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service should you want more help. I wish you good luck, Bri.