The Physician Assistant Essay and Personal Statement Collaborative

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1. Kate B says

   April 18, 2024 at 1:09 pm

   I was twelve years old visiting long distance family at the beach with my grandparents and it was everything I could have imagined. Late nights spent crab hunting on the beach, early mornings spent at some hole-in-the-wall diner, and all the time in between tirelessly riding waves in the ocean. Not ready for this dreamy vacation to be over, I thought up multiple scenarios to keep us all in the tiny beach house in Ocean City, Maryland, but I never could have imagined that it would end the way it did.
   About an hour into my drive home with my grandparents, my dear grandfather slumped over in the driver’s seat. The flashing lights and loud sirens in partnership with the unfamiliar environment and flooding emotions of potentially losing my grandfather everything was far too much for my twelve-year-old self to handle. The ability of the emergency healthcare professionals to respond so quickly and efficiently to save my grandfather’s life was nothing short of remarkable. Unfortunately, my grandfather was not able to be saved that day, however, the professionals were unbelievably inspiring to a helpless and curious young girl in that situation. Ever since that traumatic day, I knew I had to pursue work in the healthcare field, hopefully being able to provide life-saving care while also inspiring children to pursue fields in medicine.
   I have been granted endless opportunities to work within healthcare while working towards my bachelor’s degree. First, my time on multiple different medical units in a regional hospital was more than academically educational. Becoming a patient care technician (PCT) taught me the trials and tribulations of a professional working in that difficult environment, but also exposed me to the emotions of being a patient. In this position, I was not only responsible for obtaining vital signs and other mandatory life-saving procedures, but I also found myself to be a shoulder to cry on, someone to vent to, or just a comforting smile. My job was not only important to the hospital staff members by relieving workload, but the patients also relied on me a lot to help manage the emotional and physical anguish they were experiencing. The positive impact that I seemingly left on these patients was one of the most rewarding things that I have experienced. Knowing that I could impact people that much without even being a necessarily “crucial” part of their care team emphasized how important my future as a PA would be.
   These past few months, after completing my bachelor’s degree, I have been working in a pediatrician’s office as a medical assistant. I have always had a strong attraction to working with kids and knew that my professional work would, ultimately, be centered around children. After shadowing a few different PAs, by no surprise, my favorite specialty was pediatrics. Rachel Raymond, PA-C, was the most inspiring of them all, and now I have the unimaginable opportunity to work alongside her and facilitate patient care. Seeing her interact with the young children while also putting parents’ minds at ease over constant concerns teaches me the importance of the job. Child development is very crucial for the state of the future, and pediatric physicians and physician assistants are at the forefront of it.
   College courses, shadowing opportunities, and medical field experience have all made me realize that I am on the right path and there is no other profession better fit for me than becoming a PA. Working alongside PAs in various fields has taught me so much about the profession. They can work so seamlessly with physicians while also having their independent ways of practicing. There are endless amounts of areas of study and so much flexibility between specialties as a PA. Most PAs have more direct patient care than MDs while also being granted a better work-life balance. Overall, becoming a PA went from being something that I could work towards to being something that I needed to work towards.
   Going into my first year as a college student, everything was so uncertain. I was starting my undergraduate career in the Fall of 2020, a crazy time that we are all familiar with. My whole first year was completely online. It was unprecedented, but somewhat manageable knowing and understanding that everyone was going through the same thing as me. However, my second year was the scariest. Classes were moved to in-person. After a year off from in-person classes, I forgot what it was like to be a student, let alone what it was like to be a college student! I was taking difficult classes while navigating college life. I was completely overwhelmed. Organic Chemistry 2 hit me in the second semester of my second year, and I, admittedly, hit a wall. The previous semester, I was lucky enough to have a friend in that class, who was an essential part in my success. However, I did not have this support in the following semester, and I was lost without it. Through many sleepless nights and stress-filled days, I was not able to perform adequately in the class, forcing me to retake it over the summer. To my surprise, the professor and my peers were much more supportive and made the class material fun to learn (relearn in this sense)! I was able to bump my grade up one whole grade letter with the much-needed support of peers and my professor in a class of that caliber. From this experience, I learned the importance of support. With support and my unfailing drive to succeed, I had everything I needed to get to my goal.
   Despite my qualifications on paper, I have been told that I am a reliable, empathetic, and hardworking young woman. I have always been passionate about my work and strive to inspire others to be motivated and goal-oriented. I want to be a PA because I feel that my purpose is to help others and there is no better way to do that than as a team. My admittance into a program will only propel me to become the person that I am meant to be.

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2. Jane Williams says

   April 17, 2024 at 2:41 pm

   Picture a healthcare ally who embodies the precision of a surgeon and the empathy of a trusted friend – that’s the essence of a Physician Assistant (PA) to me. During my time as a Clinical Research Assistant (CRA) at the University of Cincinnati Medical Center (UCMC), I was talking to a patient about a study, explaining procedures and the samples needed. Among visits from various healthcare workers, a PA stood out. Unlike others, he sat, listened, and showed genuine compassion. I witnessed my vision of an ideal healthcare worker. It was my first encounter seeing a PA in action, and their approach resonated with me. Coincidentally, the PA was Mr. Ryan Armento who is also involved with clinical research. I had the invaluable opportunity to shadow him. While shadowing, a 19-year-old arrived with a laceration and suicidal thoughts. I felt troubled but the PA said, “At least he came to the hospital asking for help and didn’t walk to a bridge”. This perspective inspired me, shaping my aspiration for empathetic patient care. While the PA sutured, I offered my hand. As he burst into tears, I felt the weight of his pain and understood how significant it was for me to hold his hand.
   I took a course called Healthcare Exploration (HCE) at the University of Cincinnati, College of Medicine which allowed me to work as a Patient Care Assistant (PCA) at UCMC. I often give value to small gestures. During my hospital orientation, I was having a simple conversation with a patient over vitals. I made a joke; she giggled, and it was going great for my first day. The nursing director was on her rounds asking for feedback. After a while, she came to the nursing station and asked, “Who’s xxxxx?”. I was worried, thinking I did something wrong, and that too on my first day. She walked towards me, lowered her voice, and asked, “Do you know the patient in room 6430?”, I said, “Yes, is something wrong?”. She said, “Quite the opposite, the patient told me that she had not laughed in a while, and it was you that brought her joy today. So, I would suggest you keep doing what you’re doing because you’re doing great.” This experience taught me the importance of compassion and patience in healthcare. It’s not only about fulfilling duties impeccably but also about connecting with patients on a human level. This has solidified my passion for becoming a PA, where I can continue to make a difference in the lives of patients with the same sincerity and enthusiasm I cultivated as a PCA. My role as a PCA allowed me to give direct care to patients, I love my job, but I want to be able to do more for my patients. The sense of responsibility I felt for each person I assisted was immense, driving me to ensure their comfort and safety during a stressful and difficult part of their lives. Being there for my patients gave me a feeling of joy and contentment. Prior, to each shift, I consciously prepare myself mentally, recognizing the challenges patients face and how I would want to be treated if I were them. Being a PA is more than just a job for me; it’s a commitment to the well-being of individuals under my care.
   Initially, navigating the US education system was challenging, complicated by the shift to online learning due to Covid 19. Transitioning to hybrid and in-person classes presented additional hurdles, such as adapting to in-person exams and learning strategies. Despite my initial struggles with managing heavy course loads, I gradually honed my time management skills and discovered effective learning strategies tailored to my needs. I also studied with peers which helped me understand concepts better. Reflecting on my journey, I recognize substantial growth. My unwavering belief in the PA vocation was further affirmed when I assumed the role of President of the Student Association of Pre-Physician Assistants (SAPPA). In this capacity, my mission was to actively involve more international students, fostering a sense of community and shared commitment to the pursuit of excellence in healthcare.
   To me, being a PA isn’t merely about treating symptoms; it’s about fostering long-term well-being, one patient at a time. The HCE class gave me a deeper understanding of every healthcare role. In my journey from volunteering in a hospital to becoming a CRA, PCA, and President of SAPPA, I’ve cultivated values of empathy, teamwork, and patient-centered care. I have embraced challenges as learning opportunities and tried to overcome them with different strategies. Despite the challenges I have faced, I would like to embrace them as learning opportunities and find new ways to overcome them. I have witnessed the impactful work of PAs and have resonated with their diverse responsibilities at various levels. Stepping into PA school will not only allow me to be one step closer to my calling but also enable me to serve patients with the utmost dedication and sincerity while being able to use my critical thinking skills and my love for science.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 19, 2024 at 9:14 am

     Jane,
     Your compassionate nature resonates throughout your essay.
     I suggest including some of the medical knowledge and clinical skills you have gained throughout your journey. Also, what other aspects appeal to you about the PA role? Collaborating with a healthcare team, the ability to switch specialties?
     Lastly, physician assistant does not need to be capitalized unless it is beginning a sentence. Should you want more help, remember that we are taking essay submissions for our revision service. I wish you good luck, Jane.

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3. Anna O. says

   April 15, 2024 at 5:34 pm

   “Can you hold my hand? I proceeded to smile, nod, and grab the clammy hand of the stranger I had just watch crash their motorcycle as he laid on the pavement bleeding out from a tibia/fibula compound fracture; the scent of metallic blood and acrid gasoline fumes filled my nose, his grip loosened and I prayed the ambulance we had called seemingly 5 years ago, would come soon. I closed my eyes, recalling the events that happened within the past 10 minutes while simultaneously wondering if the shoelace tourniquet would hold, if the man holding his c-spine was going to do more damage to than good, and if I was going to be the last person to ever hold his hand. So I squeezed tighter, never wanting this stranger to feel alone, no matter his state of consciousness, while my other hand continued to monitor his radial pulse. Suddenly, a faint wail of sirens approached and this makeshift trauma team breathed a collective sigh of relief. They loaded him into the ambulance, communicating his name over the radio, and while it had no significance to me, my partner immediately recognized it; because of this, we were able to follow along with his recovery. When he was well enough to return home, we were invited to a barbecue celebrating his recovery; I remember being nervous about attending and even came close to not going as the idea of being in a house of strangers while also simultaneously being in the “spotlight” as the one who “saved his life” would mean I had to relive that awful day and answer questions that arose from morbid curiosity. The day came and we arrived at the house where I saw a gaunt version of the man that I had simultaneously met and nearly lost that day. He wheeled over to greet us, I looked down at his battered leg enclosed in a halo brace and shuddered; images and smells of carnage flooded back. He grabbed my hand, realigning in the moment, and said “you didn’t let go.” He went on to thank me for doing what I had done, revealing doctors had told him my quick thinking and coordination is what not only saved his life but his leg. I beamed with pride but my mind hung on those 4 words. The simple gesture of holding his hand is what he remembered in moments of terror and panic; unconscious for the majority our embrace, yet he somehow knew I never let go. This defining moment confirmed my path; I not only wanted to be a PA because I loved medicine, but to be the provider who took the time to hold my patient’s hand. I reveled in the fact that this is what he retained and thought if I can give my future patients this sense of comfort in their worst moments, I would have an extremely fulfilling and passion-filled career as a PA.
   Throughout college, the classes/extracurricular activities I partook in have granted me numerous opportunities to shadow, volunteer, and work in the healthcare field; every provider has influenced me and further solidified my career goals. Like many entering this trade, I have always had an admiration and fascination with medicine. I love puzzles and yearn to be an integral part of solving medical mysteries and treating ailments/injuries; while these desires still ring true, this newfound, deeply-rooted desire to provide empathetic care and be not only a source of comfort but be an advocate for patients is what continues to motivate me to become a PA.
   While it has been hard to face rejection through the last 2 application cycles, I have unwavering confidence that this is the career I wish to pursue and rather than dwelling on these “misfires,” I have taken these past 2 years to further my personal/professional development. Demonstrating my commitment to this field, I have victoriously tackled courses that both expanded my knowledge and equipped me with the necessary grit to be a top student. Working 50 hours a week while furthering my education was arduous but being no stranger to a busy schedule, my discipline has allowed me to curate a lifestyle to ensure triumph and I now feel more prepared than ever to matriculate.
   This past year, I observed/aided doctors and PAs in the identification/treatment of skin ailments, and was able to discover some of the over 1500 dermatological conditions that exist at a dermatology clinic. The countless hands-on opportunities to assist in surgery have been invaluable, however, with Mohs surgery, the patient is awake which can be daunting for both providers and patients. I not only get to be an integral part of surgery but also provide comfort to patients whether it be by explaining procedures or metaphorically and, at times, literally holding their hand. I credit this position for supplying many auspicious tools/skills that I look forward to carrying forward, but there have been hardships. Performing up to 14 surgeries or seeing close to 60 patients on a gen-derm day, mixed with a sometimes toxic work environment has led to ups and downs but pressure creates diamonds and I can confidently say I have handled every challenge with professionalism and it has fostered growth. I have observed differing, and sometimes inappropriate/inadequate interactions/approaches to treatment but this only further enforces my goals to be a charismatic and competent provider that will always emphasize high-quality patient care no matter what external factors may try to limit this.
   Through my work at UCSD’s EPARC Lab, I have realized I not only have a passion for research but that healthcare must be supported by continuing development and acknowledgement of public health. As a research associate, I have supported numerous medical professionals and have capitalized on opportunities to use new and innovative technology to advance medicine in order to better treat patients. As a PA, I plan on using my experience to challenge the limits of science which will hopefully create new treatments, new technology and in short, new solutions so that many more can survive and thrive.
   I have never asked for easy, only possible and I fully plan to perpetuate this mindset as a student and future PA. As an asset to any program, I look forward to working alongside like minded individuals and forging relationships while also learning not only to treat but continue to empathize, comfort, and care because if I can make a difference in someone’s darkest moments, even if it is as simple as holding their hand, I know I will have fulfilled my purpose and achieved my goals.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 17, 2024 at 2:37 pm

     Anna,
     Your introduction immediately grabs the reader’s attention and reveals your strength, even in a time of crisis. With that said, you may need to tighten the story somewhat so you can include a few more elements of your journey.
     I would add more details about what specifically draws you to the PA role over another type of provider. In addition, include any shadowing you have had and describe how that helped to solidify your decision.
     You mention skills you have gained in addition to assisting with MOHS procedures; elaborate on some of those. I also suggest removing your comments about coworkers in this section. You don’t want to appear to be criticizing another provider in your essay.
     Should you want more help, remember that we are taking suggestions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Anna.

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     • Anna says

       May 5, 2024 at 7:36 pm

       Thank you Whitney, I greatly appreciate your advice and will edit my essay with your advice in mind!

       Thank you again,
       Anna

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4. Elisa says

   April 14, 2024 at 7:28 pm

   Hello,

   I am a re-applicant and wanted to share my original essay. Hoping to get suggestions on what to keep/remove. Any suggestions would be great! Thank you for your time and feedback!

   Just past midnight, I was awakened by the smell of burning wood. Flames danced near my bedroom window. My parents rushed in, and we evacuated our home. The next morning, we learned that the fire had been intentionally started by a homeless man, resentful of being kicked out of our property the day before for trespassing. I grew up in South Central Los Angeles, where this incident was not out of the ordinary as crime, poverty, and drug addiction plagued my community. I watched my friend overdose at the age of thirteen, and I lost neighbors and family friends to violence. These experiences made me feel hopeless and led to my decision to leave after high school. However, I didn’t know then that I would one day view these experiences and the perspective I gained as an advantage. I didn’t know then that they would help me relate to patients as a healthcare professional and future PA.

   When I started college, I understandably lacked the basic tools needed to be a successful student. Educated in LA’s inner-city schools, I didn’t know how to study or ask for help. I maintained employment, as my parents were unable to support me due to their own financial hardships as non-native citizens. I prioritized work over my studies. This issue was further exacerbated in the spring of 2015 after losing two family members within two weeks, which markedly affected my GPA. Fortunately, change was around the corner.

   After graduating, I began working in rural Eureka, California, as a medical scribe. In the emergency and oncology departments, I observed the way PAs assessed the patient. I realized the importance of analyzing and processing all the problems to determine the health of an individual. They placed a strong focus on preventive care, which minimized hospital visits.

   My desire to become a PA was confirmed when I met a traveling PA headed to Guatemala to provide aid after a volcanic eruption. This inspired me to do more research, and I realized PAs could do locum tenens and work in various specialties. Becoming a PA would give me the flexibility to work in internal medicine and emergency medicine with the option to explore other fields. As a PA, I could provide care in rural communities and underserved urban areas. Specifically, serving the Latino community and easing their apprehension and mistrust of our healthcare system. One of my aspirations is to provide humanitarian medical services in Central America given my Maya background.

   In the ER, I found myself gravitating towards working in fast track with the PAs rather than with the trauma unit. It was there that I met a PA named Brooke. Even though the physicians often relied on Brooke to reduce the patient load, she was consistently thorough when she went over her treatment plan, which was something I did not see working in the back. During one shift, a teenage girl came in distress after a panic attack. Once the patient calmed down, Brooke taught her the five senses ground technique, something both the patient and her mother had never heard of. This was a turning point for them because they could incorporate it in the future and potentially prevent a visit to the ER.

   After deciding to become a PA, I enrolled in a post-baccalaureate program, turning my grades around. During this time, I first saw how my background is an advantage. Working in a predominantly white community, I would occasionally come across Spanish-speaking patients who would breathe a sigh of relief when they saw me walk in the room. They knew that I understood the implications of the language barrier that often affected their care.

   Since returning to Los Angeles, I have dedicated my time to a homeless shelter on Skid Row as a volunteer ambassador. This opportunity has taught me leadership, expanded my understanding of our country’s medical and mental health crisis, and furthered my desire to become a PA. During a health fair, I met an unhoused man seeking HIV services who needed help filling out the health questionnaire. While assisting him, I noticed that he frequently paused between sentences, which he attributed to chronic shortness of breath that started after contracting COVID-19. As he ambulated, I observed his profound lower extremity edema, leading to skin breakdown. I knew that he would soon start weeping serous fluids if his water retention was not addressed. Various differential diagnoses raced through my mind, but mostly I thought about how I could get him to follow-up with someone. Fortunately, there was a social worker on site, and together, we connected him with a local clinic.

   As a first-generation college graduate, I am motivated to continue my education while advocating for better healthcare services in underserved communities. As a South-Central LA native, I feel compelled to give back to other unprivileged communities. My experiences have taught me compassion, empathy, and, most importantly, resilience. All of these will help me connect with patients on a deeper level as a PA.

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5. Caitlin O'Leary says

   April 12, 2024 at 10:51 pm

   Mr.X came to the ED during my clinicals for my CNA training, presenting with symptoms of alcohol withdrawal. He was extremely violent and confused. Due to his agitated state, the doctor was forced to intubate to continue testing. I watched Mr.X get intubated, helped transport him to the ICU, and went home for the day. During my ICU rotation, I was again assigned Mr.X. He woke up from a sedated state, and I was the one with him, helping to explain how he got there. A few days later, during my Med/Surg rotation, Mr.X was part of my assignment. His condition had greatly improved, and I helped him take walks around the halls and prepare for discharge. As I bid Mr.X goodbye, he proceeded to tell me his rotation of bars he patrons, one by one from open to close. Although I had only just began my journey working in healthcare, something made me realize that it was my job to remind Mr.X drinking was what landed him here in the first place. As the child of a recovering alcoholic, I felt called to remind him of his options. I printed him out a packet of local AA meetings, reminding him that something much worse than a hospital stay could occur if he kept on this path. The following week, my mom came home from an AA meeting and told me about a new member who shared about his recent stay in the hospital and the “angel from God” there who gave him the AA meetings list and helped him realize it was time to get sober.
   That was when I realized healthcare was where I was meant to be. Patients like Mr. X everywhere need someone to have hard conversations with them to improve their overall health. In my experience working as a CNA, I see every day how imperative a capable and compassionate provider is to patients. In overwhelmed practices and hospitals, not every provider is able to listen and be present for as long as they would wish. The role of a PA makes it possible to spend more time with patients by easing the load of practices. Although I do not have the education to ease my patients’ worries on the science of their disease, there is no better feeling than providing emotional comfort in their hardest times. As a PA, I would hope to do both: alleviate patients’ emotional worries and use my education to provide them with the care and education to alleviate their health concerns and allow them to live as their happiest and healthiest selves. There are an innumerable amount of patients today who lack access to quality care and education about their health, and I am passionate about being able to provide both in my future as a PA.
   One of the aspects of the PA path that attracts me the most is the ability to work in different specialties. I see a plethora of diseases and conditions at work, and I love being able to learn from the providers and nurses about the etiology of them. The opportunity to specialize in different fields would give me a chance to explore many interests and curate my choice in specialty to my locale and my stage of life. More importantly, in a smaller community like my own, it is evident that some specialties are lacking in providers. I see patients who are admitted because their condition became critical while waiting for an appointment at a specialty practice. We simply do not have the resources to see all the patients in need in a timely manner in our quickly growing community. As a PA, the ability to work in a specialty that has need and make that field more accessible would allow me to alleviate the stress of healthcare availability and adapt to a community’s needs. I am very eager to help people have access to the healthcare they require, and the PA role is ideal for this due to its flexibility in specialty.
   I have been exposed to a diverse field of patients through my work as a CNA, and this experience coupled with my dedication to lifelong learning and my love for being on a team would make me a wonderful PA. As a student athlete through college, the parts of my identity I loved the most was being a student, but more importantly being the member of a team. I struggled immensely when I lost this part of my identity immediately after graduating and was able to find it again being a part of a new type of team, the nursing and healthcare team. However, I feel as though I am not able to learn and fulfill my full potential due to my education limitations and my scope of practice in my role on the team. As a CNA, there is not always time to ask the questions I have about the science behind my patients’ conditions, which can be frustrating for someone as inquisitive and fascinated by the human body as I am. A future as a PA would allow me to learn every day from the other providers around me and collaborate with them and the rest of the healthcare team to ensure community health, an excellent patient experience, patient education, and effective diagnosis and treatment of disease. I cannot wait to begin my journey to becoming a PA and fulfill my dream of being a pivotal member of the healthcare team.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 17, 2024 at 2:19 pm

     Caitlin,
     Your compassion and resourcefulness shine through your introduction. You also effectively explain why you are drawn to the PA profession. I suggest including any shadowing experience you have gained, describing what about this experience confirmed your decision. Additionally, include any medical experience and clinical skills you have gained. Lastly, for your conclusion, you may want to tie back to your introduction in some way.
     We are taking essay submissions for revision should you want more help. Good luck to you, Caitlin.

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6. Bianca Monteagudo says

   April 12, 2024 at 1:13 pm

   Amongst the bustling activity of a mobile medical clinic in the Dominican Republic, I found myself cradling a baby covered in rashes while her mother received treatment. Acting as a translator between the Spanish-speaking doctor and the English-speaking patient, I bore the weight of communication as much as the infant’s tired limbs pressed against my arms. My thoughts were racing with concerns about the contagiousness of the baby’s affliction and I couldn’t shake off worries about the potential repercussions on my own health. Despite my discomfort, I witnessed a beautiful display of unity among the medical team, bonded by our Christian faith. Doctors, nurses, and scribes from diverse backgrounds worked seamlessly to diagnose and treat patients with basic care. Even upon learning that the baby’s rash was contagious, a doctor affirmed my body’s capacity to combat the infection. This experience opened my eyes to the harsh realities of poverty, leaving me with a newfound appreciation for the privileges and resources I often take for granted. Indeed, they say “discomfort can be a catalyst for growth,” and I can attest to that. This encounter taught me resilience and empathy in the face of adversity while also deepening my love for medicine.

   My journey into the medical field began at a young age, as I vividly recall accompanying my step-mom to her job at an ophthalmology practice every “Take Your Child to Work Day.” As I grew older, I delved deeper into the field through shadowing doctors and surgeries, solidifying my desire to pursue a career in medicine. At 16, I started working at the same ophthalmology practice I attended growing up and got hands-on healthcare experience. Every day I would see and admire how the optometrist and the ophthalmologist interact to build treatment plans for their patients. Once I started at Nova Southeastern University for my undergraduate degree, I was able to dive deeper into my love for medicine and get involved at work and in clubs on campus. Although I was set on becoming a doctor, I started learning about what being a nurse, physician assistant (PA), and many other career paths entailed.

   During my undergraduate studies, I faced challenges in balancing work commitments with academics, especially in my science courses. Due to poor time management, I prioritized social activities over studying, leading to mediocre grades. The shift to online learning in 2020, amidst the pandemic, made the workload even more intense. However, I learned valuable lessons from these experiences, which helped me improve my academic performance progressively. Later on, I pursued a Master’s degree in Biomedical Science at Barry University, where I refined my study skills and maintained a 4.0 GPA in graduate-level science courses. Engaging with professors who also teach in the PA program boosted my confidence in tackling a rigorous curriculum similar to that expected in my first year of PA school.

   After shadowing at an internal medicine practice, I witnessed the dynamic between physician assistants and physicians, sparking my interest in the collaborative nature of the PA profession and how it reflected what I saw at work. As I continued working and became an ophthalmic technician assistant, my desire to be a PA solidified. I learned to work hands-on with patients by measuring their visual acuity, using a slit lamp, and taking other measurements using ophthalmic equipment. My love for medicine grew as I worked directly with patients and the other doctors and technicians around me. I learned to work effectively with my coworkers and communicate well with patients. While I cherished my role at work, my shadowing experiences affirmed my desires to pursue something outside of the scope of ophthalmology. The versatility and collaborative nature of the PA profession resonated with my career aspirations, making it the perfect fit for me.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 15, 2024 at 10:13 am

     Bianca,
     Your desire to help patients is revealed throughout your essay. I suggest not wasting characters mentioning other types of providers, such as MDs and nurses, and focusing on what appeals to you specifically about the PA profession.
     You are wise to mention your grades, but I suggest moving this paragraph to right before your conclusion. I would also briefly mention a strategy or two for how you improved your study skills and earned that 4.0. (Good for you.) Lastly, include a concluding paragraph that ties back to your introduction in some way while reiterating your desire to have great responsibility for patient care. Good luck to you and remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service should you want more assistance.

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7. Cassie says

   April 11, 2024 at 12:17 pm

   This is a very rough draft but I would love to know what you think!

   As a child, while most kids were idolizing athletes or movie stars, I found my heroes in the pages of science textbooks and the depths of laboratory discoveries. Rather than collecting baseball cards, I collected the names of esteemed scientists like trading cards, with luminaries like Marie Curie and Louis Pasteur taking center stage in my collection. In elementary school, I found myself asking for extra homework from my teachers, seeking to acquire more and more knowledge. This passion for learning and love for science has only deepened through the years and led me to a desire to study medicine.

   My academic journey at ******, enriched by both coursework and extracurricular activities, has deepened my passion for science and intensified my drive to embark on a career in medicine. Courses like microbiology, genetics, and molecular development haven’t just expanded my knowledge; they’ve also stirred a sense of camaraderie with the scientific pioneers I’ve admired since childhood. Instead of merely accepting information at face value, my professors encouraged me to question established truths and explore alternative solutions, fostering a resilient and inquisitive mindset. Additionally, I was granted opportunities to volunteer at a local hospital’s emergency department, where I gained first hand exposure to the dynamics of patient care, from triage to treatment. It was through these experiences during undergrad that I demonstrated skills of collaboration, communication, and versatility – all of which are critical to a medical professional’s success in providing compassionate and effective care.

   To gain hands-on experiences in the medical field, I entered a role as an Emergency Medical Technician. I was enthralled by the unpredictability and ever-changing nature of emergency medicine, which prompted me to continue learning. Working alongside doctors, nurse practitioners, and physician assistants- while giving a detailed patient report- made me yearn for a larger role in the care of patients. I wanted to do more than just stabilize patients; I wanted to be involved in their ongoing care, to delve deeper into their health concerns and be part of the solution. As I transitioned from the ambulance to the hospital, taking on the role of a medical assistant, I found myself immersed in a collaborative healthcare environment where every member of the team played a crucial role in patient care.

   One particularly poignant experience in primary care underscored for me the profound impact that compassionate and collaborative care can have on an individual’s life. One day, a 50 year old-Spanish speaking patient scheduled an appointment for help recalibrating his at-home blood pressure monitor, as it had been giving him error messages for a few days prior. After numerous failed attempts to get a reading from his machine, I took initiative by obtaining his manual blood pressure and performing an EKG- which depicted a complete heart blockage. Scared and confused, this patient turned to me for comfort, as I was able to effectively communicate with him in Spanish. As we waited for an ambulance to arrive, which brought him to the hospital where he would later need a pacemaker to be placed, I fully understood the importance of compassionate and collaborative care. Therefore, my past experiences prepared me to remain poised and demonstrate that as a PA, I will not stop giving my patients the utmost level of care that they deserve.

   Although I have worked with and shadowed numerous types of healthcare professionals, the role of physician assistants has left the most enduring impression on me. Particularly, a surgical PA named Aldo inspired me immensely due to his versatility of knowledge and ability to form strong and trusting relationships with his patients. As the only Spanish speaking PA in his department, Aldo took responsibility for these patients to ensure that they felt comfortable and listened to. This resonated with me deeply, as I created an Independent study focusing on medical Spanish to gain a full understanding of vocabulary and culture awareness that is needed when treating Spanish speaking patients. I hope that this study can be used as a reference for professors to teach a medical Spanish course at **** in the future. Thus, as the scientists of our past have, I strive to make an everlasting impression on the people around me, giving voices to underrepresented communities and providing the same level of care to all.

   Where once my inspirations were the pioneering scientists of the past, I now find my greatest source of inspiration in these dedicated and compassionate physician assistants whom I hope to follow in the footsteps of.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 15, 2024 at 9:59 am

     Cassie,
     You effectively relay your growing desire to learn, impact patients, and collaborate with a healthcare team. Additionally, your patient care story and shadowing paragraphs are strong. I suggest including a few more details about what specifically appeals to you about the PA profession over another type of provider role. Also, I would expand your conclusion and reiterate your desire to have greater responsibility for the patients within your care. Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. Good luck, Cassie.

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8. Jenna Rivas says

   April 10, 2024 at 8:28 pm

   Hello, this is the first draft of my personal statement. Any advice/criticism is appreciated!

   Upon graduating from high school, I was unfamiliar with the different medical careers. Coming from a smaller high school with little exposure to the healthcare field, I knew of two possible options: doctor or nurse. I grew interested in medical science and health education, but these two options sparked no interest. I spent the weeks leading up to my first year of college unsure of the career path I would take. While mindlessly scrolling on social media during quarantine, I discovered the physician assistant profession. I could only describe this night as my “light bulb” moment. The PA profession was the perfect balance of what I was searching for in a job in medicine.

   A significant factor that intrigued me was learning about a PA’s role in the healthcare team. While some may argue that a PA works under a physician, this relationship is more collaborative. In my experience shadowing, I saw PAs who were independent and confident in their treatment plans. My autonomy as a PA will allow me to focus on and deliver patient-centered care. I feel this is different from the role of a doctor, who plays a more supervisory role for all healthcare team members and their patients. I believe the collaborative relationship between a physician and a PA can enhance the treatment plan and create positive health outcomes.

   The second factor that led me on the pre-PA path was my ability to switch specialties. I am an individual with a strong desire to expand my knowledge continuously. With lateral mobility as a PA, I will not limit myself to one specialty area. I believe this to be an essential factor in a PA’s role as a medical generalist. The ability to switch specialties will allow me to increase my knowledge and training in different areas, improving my skills in treating patients of various conditions and demographics.

   At the beginning of this year, I started a new role as a medical assistant in an adult clinic. While I have learned many clinical skills, learning to listen to my patients is my biggest lesson. I am learning the importance of understanding the patient’s emotional journey. I remember one female patient coming in for a follow-up appointment after learning she was recently diagnosed with breast cancer. She walked in, scared and frustrated, talking about her recent visits with multiple doctors and waiting for further lab results. I assured her we would share her new results as soon as possible, and though it would be a long journey, she would have the whole office staff supporting her. I could also see the stress affecting her self-esteem. I had to take an updated photo of her on the same visit. She was hesitant initially, but I offered her words of affirmation, telling her I needed a beautiful image of her with a pretty smile. She slowly agreed, and I could see she was more relaxed when I showed her the new picture. I am learning with many patients that their biggest fear is not knowing what comes next. As a PA, I will build a trusting relationship with my patients in which they feel comfortable sharing their symptoms and emotions and provide them with reassurance and support.

   My community engagement work has taught me that service is about using my knowledge and resources to help those less fortunate. With this in mind, I intend to use my knowledge not only to treat my patients but also to educate them. Intervention through medications alone is not enough to optimize patient well-being. In my experience with patients dealing with chronic conditions, there is a significant lack of understanding of their diagnosis and its effect on their overall health. Coming from South Texas, my community is significantly negatively affected by chronic diseases that are preventable or modifiable. I see many patients with complaints due to complications of diabetes, smoking, and an overall sedentary lifestyle. When asked about their lifestyle habits, they are clearly unaware of the negative effect it has on their health. I believe this is due to the lack of health education in the Rio Grande Valley. For these reasons, I intend to support my patients by educating them about the process of their condition and emphasizing prevention. I hope to be able to guide my patients into favorable health decisions that will have a positive, lasting effect on their lives.

   My experiences in the health science and care setting thus far have solidified my decision to pursue a distinguished career as a physician assistant. I am excited to continue growing my clinical skills and expanding my medical knowledge, which I will use in my career to guide and support my patients to optimize health outcomes. I am confident that I embody the qualities of compassion and support that will make me a diligent provider. In my future career as a PA, I aspire to be a pivotal member of the healthcare team and gain the trust of my community, of which I have been proud to be a part for so long.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 11, 2024 at 7:12 pm

     Jenna,
     Good job explaining what appeals to you about the PA role – and the importance it plays in the healthcare system. Your story about connecting with the patient also shines, highlighting some of the qualities you possess that will make you an effective provider.
     You mention that you learned many clinical skills; I would list some of those. You want to show how these roles have prepared you for a rigorous PA program.
     If you have done any shadowing, I would describe that. Was there an interaction that stood out to you between PA/patient or PA/supervising physician?
     Should you want more help, remember we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. Good luck, Jenna

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9. Sydney Underwood says

   April 10, 2024 at 10:14 am

   “A player is only as strong as the teammates that are surrounding her.” I was reminded of this statement each day as I stepped into my high school gymnasium for basketball practice. I was instilled with the concept of “team” from a very young age. When I played little league basketball, “team” meant the people that I got to play with for an hour every day after school. As I grew older, this concept changed into something completely different for me. From day one of my sophomore season, our new coach taught us that respect and trust in each other were the number one priority on our team. Although it seemed like common sense, we did not quite understand what that meant until our whole team was hit with the flu and coronavirus, and we all fell severely ill. It was then that we understood what it meant to be a team. When some lacked the strength to give their utmost effort, we all took up the slack for one another. This type of team dynamic was something that I knew I would continue to search for as I followed my career path.

   I was first introduced to the physician assistant (PA) profession through Brandi Moore, PA-C. Surprisingly enough, I did not come into relationship with Brandi in a clinical, professional setting. I began babysitting her children the summer before my junior year of high school. While spending the summer with her and her family, I got to observe a working mother who managed to mix being a full-time medical provider with being a present wife and mother of three kids. I expressed my interest in the PA profession to her and she allowed me to come observe her in a clinical setting and learn more about what it means to be a PA. One day while shadowing her as she collected a patient’s medical history and began to formulate a treatment plan, she told me something that I have never forgotten, “A stellar healthcare provider listens to their patients without dismissing them. Often, if you just listen to what they are telling you, they will likely lead you exactly to where the issue lies. Approaching the situation with preconceived notions can hinder you from providing the correct and appropriate diagnosis and treatment plan.”

   Although I had background knowledge in science from my primary education, it was not until I attended the Southwest Virginia Governor’s School in Pulaski, Virginia that I started to emphasize science and math. The passion that my instructors had for the curriculum was instilled in me, and I became inspired to pursue a career in healthcare science. I had accumulated two years’ worth of college education upon graduating high school and I did not plan on slowing down until I was able to reach my goal of becoming a PA. In my short time of undergrad, my scientific knowledge expanded far past what I thought was possible for me, and with each challenge came an even more fulfilling sense of accomplishment. The most influential course I took during undergrad was Cancer Biology. I showed up each day to class eager to learn more about such a complex and prevalent disease that has affected so many lives across the world. Getting to learn not only the pathological characteristics of the disease, but the implications of how our healthcare system approaches the problems presented with cancer sparked my interest in oncological medicine. Any notions I had that I wanted to become a PA became solidified and I was 100% confident in my passion for the PA profession.

   Once I had the goal of becoming a PA, I began to seek out clinical opportunities that would further expand my knowledge of the profession and understand the role PAs play in a healthcare setting. My experience began at Roanoke Memorial Hospital where I worked as a patient care technician on a stroke and neurology unit. There, I provided direct patient care and assistance to a variety of healthcare team members. I was able to see firsthand how each profession plays a vital role when it comes to patient care. Observing the PAs in the hospital and watching them collaborate with each branch of medicine to formulate a diagnosis and treatment plan felt exactly like the team dynamic that felt so familiar to me and what I had been searching for. My experience continued as I began volunteering at a local clinic in my community. Being from a medically underserved area, I have seen firsthand the effects of inadequate healthcare coverage and the need for resources and medical education. I was able to see how patient care not only relies on the relationship between the provider and the patient but also on what resources are available to patients due to financial circumstances.

   As I am drawing near to becoming a PA student, my eagerness and excitement continue to grow. My compassion and dedication to the profession have brought me this far and I can say with confidence that it will continue to serve me if allowed to take the next step in your program. My educational background and clinical experience have shaped me into a student who is passionate about rural healthcare and becoming a team member who upholds respect and accountability in collaboration with others.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     April 11, 2024 at 6:57 pm

     Sydney,
     You effectively explain how you discovered the PA profession and how your decision was solidified. I suggest spotlighting some of the clinical skills you have gained throughout your roles. You may want to also include a story that shows you providing care of some kind while also connecting on a personal level. Should you want more help on your essay, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. Good luck to you, Sydney.

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10. Maddie says

    April 9, 2024 at 11:49 am

    The pulse oximeter read 96% on room air. I looked up at the mother, and after a minute of relief, we both celebrated the moment. My patient, John, was only 11 months old and had no idea what was happening, but joined in clapping after watching our reactions. John had been coming in every day for the past week, post-hospitalization for bronchiolitis. I checked him in each time, so I could see the progress he was making, eventually leading to this moment where he was taken off oxygen. The overwhelming joy when we told his family he could go home without oxygen brought on a feeling I will never forget. It was at that moment that I discovered the reason I want to be a physician assistant (PA). It showed me I will have the opportunity and autonomy to make a lasting impact on other people’s lives through the care I provide.

    My interest in becoming a PA started with a conversation most teenagers dread: “What do you want to do with your life after college?” I did not know how to answer, but I did have a list of criteria a future job must fulfill: working in collaboration to make a difference in others’ lives, doing work that requires me to think critically, and being within the field of science were among the criteria that must be met. My great uncle, a surgeon, after hearing my criteria, suggested looking into a career as a PA because he said the PAs that worked under him were some of the most compassionate and experienced individuals in the field. After researching the role, I noticed descriptions of a PA emphasized the importance of teamwork and autonomy in providing excellent patient care to diverse populations. This was it. I had the answer to the dreaded question: I wanted to become a PA.

    To gain medical experience, I started working as an EMT in a non-emergency setting after my sophomore year. Due to the nature of being an EMT, I was only with my patients for a limited amount of time, which allowed me to learn to adapt to situations and provide unique care to each patient. Most of the patients I transported were psychiatric patients that lacked support and wanted an ear to listen during a time of sadness and confusion. During transport, I would make my patients feel heard, getting down to eye level and engaging in conversation. I look forward to a career as a PA, as I will have more than a few minutes to connect with my patients to provide personalized care, and be a resource to them.

    After graduating, I began working as a medical assistant (MA) in a pediatric office. In this role, I work as a member of a team with other MAs’ under 15 providers, allowing me to learn the importance of communication and teamwork in providing excellent care to our families. Working in a pediatric office, I found the doctor’s office can be intimidating for many of our younger patients. I am the first face the patients see, and my interactions with them can dictate the outcome of the appointment. Wanting to help patient experiences, I learned the importance of recognizing patients’ differences in order to adapt to communicate effectively and make them comfortable. A welcoming smile and a simple compliment to their outfit usually goes a long way. My time spent with patients has motivated me to further pursue a career as a PA due to the difference I saw I had on others.

    Serving the economically disadvantaged is important to me. In undergrad, I was a member of a diabetes education program that used interactive workshops to help educate and prevent type 2 diabetes in nearby underserved communities. This experience granted me a deeper understanding of the importance of early education and affordable healthcare in saving lives.
    To explore the profession, I shadowed PAs in an emergency room and in a pediatric outpatient clinic. While shadowing Ben in a pediatric office, I was able to observe how his calm demeanor and ability to relate with his patients allowed him to provide the best individualized care. Shadowing Anna in a face-paced ER granted me the opportunity to watch her collaborate with physicians on other floors to analyze patient medical histories and lab results to determine next steps for her patients. Shadowing PAs in different specialties provided me with the opportunity to see the abundant possibilities and experiences available in the career.
    My experiences have proved to me that there is no other career I desire more than to work as a PA. I am capable and determined to excel in PA school, which I have shown with my GPA in undergrad while being a student athlete and involved in extracurriculars. In my work as a PA, I know no day will be the same; I will make a positive impact on people’s lives, and I will always expand my knowledge through interactions with patients and colleagues. I look forward to many more rewarding moments like my patient John’s when I become a practicing PA.

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11. Dania says

    April 8, 2024 at 3:06 pm

    Hi, this is the first draft of my personal statement, so any feedback would be great!

    On January 7th, 2020, the day of my long awaited 18th birthday, an unexpected turn of events transformed what was meant to be a day of celebration into a pivotal moment in my life. As I sat in my highschool calculus course, the chatter abruptly came to a halt as my calculus teacher, Mr. Dressel, collapsed to the floor. Silence radiated amongst the class for what felt like minutes as Mr. Dressel lay lifeless. Panic rippled through the class as I lunged toward him, and with steady hands and a racing heart I began to perform CPR. Each compression assisted in the return of his circulation, as Mr. Dressel gasped for air, his pulse returning. That defining moment ignited an infatuation within me, a desire to provide impactful healthcare and influential collaboration as a physician assistant.

    As my interest in medicine developed, I became increasingly enthralled by instantaneous medical interventions, leading me to obtain an emergency medicine technician (EMT) certification. My initial exposure to the physician assistant (PA) profession arose while on my EMT field rotation, as I observed the transformative ability of medical involvement in the life of an elderly patient who had been sitting in the waiting room of the emergency department. The elderly man had been waiting to be admitted into triage for reasons unbeknownst to me, when I caught sight of alarming symptoms from across the waiting room. The elderly man had begun to slur his speech in an incomprehensible manner and possessed a one-sided facial droop. Detecting these symptoms from a far, I immediately recognized these stroke indications, allowing me to rush to the elderly man’s side. Alerting those around me for assistance, an emergency room PA being one of them, I was able to secure the elderly man into a wheelchair and promptly deliver him to the interprofessional medical team in triage. The swift action taken that day by the PA and I ultimately saved the elderly man’s life. The immediate impact of medical interference on the elderly man only further bloomed my deep-seated vigor for medicine and exposed me to the PA profession.

    My hiring as a phlebotomy certified patient care technician (PCT) on a stem cell transplant unit solidified my aspiration of becoming a PA. As a PCT, my primary function consists of advanced clinical skills such as obtaining vitals signs, specimens, and drawing labs, while utilizing critical-thinking skills and interpersonal relations with an interdisciplinary oncology team, made up of physicians and advanced practice providers (APPs). I craved a profound desire to contribute to my community beyond my work in the hospital, consequently, I embarked on a journey of volunteering as a crisis hotline responder. This enriching role has afforded me the opportunity to engage with people from multifaceted cultural and social contexts, and through my endeavors I have fostered trustful bonds and enhanced my problem-solving abilities, skills resonating deeply with the PA role. While volunteering, I received a distressed text message from an individual grappling with suicide idealations. This revelation drove me to promptly de-escalate the situation, offering resource links to support groups and coping strategies while maintaining simultaneous communication with my supervisor, seeking guidance in the navigation of this delicate and critical situation.

    My time shadowing a PA on an inpatient stem-cell transplant unit encompassed a continuous learning environment, as the PA was encouraged to question treatment options as well as utilize fellow interdisciplinary colleagues to obtain the optimal medical regimen for each patient. The distinctive ability of PAs emanates from the lateral mobility of the profession, allowing PAs to train as generalists while also having the unique flexibility to specialize in areas of interest, which encourages the varied skill sets of the profession. This came to light when shadowing, as the PA had previously worked in emergency medicine 15 years prior, thus allowing the PA to use previous education to enhance care and provide a well-rounded practice of medicine. While shadowing, I had the opportunity to observe the PA single-handedly perform surgical procedures, such as a lumbar puncture and a bone marrow biopsy, which highlighted the autonomous role of the PA as well as an advanced scope of practice, reinforcing my decision to become a PA. I was also fortunate enough to shadow an outpatient neuro-epilepsy and psychiatric PA, where I witnessed first-hand diagnosis of neurological deficits and mental disabilities, underlying the multifaceted role that PAs portray within the healthcare field.

    Choosing the PA profession is a decision embedded in a passion for healthcare commemorated by an extensive array of skills and a comprehensive medical model of education. As I reflect on my journey and the experiences that have led me to the profession, I am confident in my decision to pursue a career as a PA. Each skill I’ve acquired will significantly enhance my journey as a PA, providing guidance in my studies and fostering my development into a versatile and capable PA. I am wholeheartedly committed and enthusiastic to embark on this fulfilling path, where I can dedicate myself to patient care and contribute meaningfully to the medical field.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 7:08 pm

      Dania,
      We offer comments on this format as a one-time courtesy, but should you like more help, we are currently taking revisions for our essay revision service.

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12. N says

    April 7, 2024 at 5:45 pm

    My statement is too long I hope to condense if all the information I need to include has been included already.

    One moment you are a well known cardiologist, and the next you have to relearn how to walk. This was the reality for my uncle, Umar, and the beginning of my journey toward becoming a physician assistant. His sudden diagnosis of encephalitis during my highschool years led my family to transfer him from Indonesia to Singapore and finally to Swedish Hospital in Seattle. Witnessing his frail, helpless and vulnerable state for the first time made me realize that feeling sad about his condition was not aiding his recovery. Throughout the course of his treatment, I witnessed the collaborative efforts of doctors, nurses and PAs on his care team as they administered medications, monitored vitals and carried out treatment plans.
    Although I lacked the expertise at the time to help, I was determined to understand medical diagnoses and provide compassionate care to my patients in the future.
    Motivated by this newfound passion, I pursued a degree in General Science and Psychology at the University of Oregon. Here is where I learned more about my uncle’s diagnosis of encephalitis, cultivated an interest in neuroscience and immersed myself as much as I could in the world of healthcare.
    Engaging with organizations such as Asklepiads provided valuable opportunities to learn from diverse medical professionals such as pediatricians and family medicine doctors as well as visit rural health hospitals within the state of Oregon.
    Through Asklepiads, I encountered Dr Clyde Byfield, a guest speaker whose perspective on patient care deeply resonated with me. Dr Byfields philosophy of viewing his patients as his peers left a lasting impression. Within the scope of family medicine, you will see patients through different stages of their lives; they grow with you, and you are there to support them through those stages. Dr Byfield created stories in order to understand the patient’s history and provide them with comprehensive care. Thus, highlighting the importance of empathy and holistic care within healthcare, another aspect I hope to bring as a PA.
    But, what stood out to me the most was his emphasis on collaboration. The idea of surrounding oneself with people who genuinely want to help others. Healthcare is not about
    who wins, but the difference you make for your patients. This is the mentality I hope to have when I become a physician assistant and work alongside a team to create treatment plans which place the patients well being first.
    Further igniting my passion for healthcare, I took on the role of treasurer of the Minority Association of Pre-Medical Students (MAPS). With assistance from the other board members, we organized an event called Dia de Salud. An event aimed at increasing health equity in the Latino community. Through volunteering, I learned essential skills such as taking blood pressure, a1cs, taking blood glucose tests and basic vitals in order to create an impact on individuals with elevated blood pressures, Type II diabetes, the importance of healthy eating and other health concerns. A form of preventative care PAs use in family medicine and in specialty care.
    Fast forward to the Covid 19 pandemic where I became an Admissions Service Coordinator at Seattle Children’s Emergency Department. While working as an ASC, I gained first-hand experience in the fast paced environment of healthcare. I learned the importance of quick service, quality of care and teamwork when it came to registering pediatric patients to their rooms. Coordinated X-rays with providers and scheduled urgent care follow ups when prompted. I also ensured the comfort of the young patients and their families by providing snacks, blankets and anything that would make their stay comfortable.
    While I appreciated the opportunity for the exposure to emergency medicine and fast-paced healthcare, I had a strong desire to have a more direct impact when it came to patient care besides paging for a provider.
    My time as an ASC was essential to my journey as I learned to emphasize patient- centered care and reinforced my passion for making a difference in patient’s lives. Ultimately, motivating me to pursue a role that had direct patient care experience and attend PA School in the future. I would then be involved in diagnosing patients and formulating treatment plants to address their concerns.
    Following my medical assistant certification, I delved into both primary care and Sports and Spine speciality. I developed a deeper appreciation for the healthcare profession. Working alongside PAs like Brian and Chang in primary care was a defining experience. Their unwavering dedication and empathy towards patient care deeply resonated with me. Thus, inspiring me to become a PA myself and emulate these qualities.
    The smaller patient panels that PAs typically manage allows for more personalized care and affords them more opportunity to spend ample time with each patient. Brian and Chang
    consistently provided thorough and comprehensive explanations to their patients’ concerns, and ensured that their patients felt heard and treated with respect. As someone who values building meaningful connections with patients and providing holistic care, I was drawn to the idea of having the time and flexibility to truly engage with patients on a deeper level.
    At Swedish Sports and Spine, I encountered patient A, an 81 year old who presented to the clinic with bilateral knee osteoarthritis. Over the span of a year, I took on various responsibilities from taking A’s vitals, drawing up anesthetics, using chloraprep to prepare for her injections and assisting the provider with the video on the ultrasound. I had also submitted authorizations, called specialty pharmacies which her insurance persistently denied the proposed hyaluronic acid treatment plans. This experience underscored the importance of perseverance and patient advocacy in healthcare.
    Similarly, a patient came in hesitant to receive her knee injections as I was helping her position herself on the table, I saw her eyes were full of fear, and her hands were shaking. I saw how anxious she was, so I stayed in the room to provide some support. I reassured her throughout the procedure and let her know that she could hold on to my hand as tightly as she needed and to let me or the provider know that if at any moment she needed to stop, we would stop. Bravely, the patient grabbed my hand and the procedure went smoothly despite a couple of screams. In this role, I learned to comfort and support patients with empathy and kindness, traits that I aim to carry forward in my career as a physician assistant.
    Ultimately, the autonomy to diagnose patients such as my uncle, collaborate with healthcare teams and follow patients through their full course of treatment entices me towards a career as a physician assistant. Being a PA represents my determination to help others, my ability to work as a team and my willingness to learn as much as I can to provide quality care for my future patients.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 7:05 pm

      I noticed this is close to the same essay that I made comments on, Nia. We only offer comments on this platform one time, but feel free to submit your essay for our revision service should you need more help.

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13. Hanaa says

    April 6, 2024 at 4:59 pm

    Hi. I just finished my first, very rough draft which exceeds the character limit so I know I need to cut down. But I would appreciate any feedback on what I have!

    From a young age, I harbored an insatiable hunger for achievement and learning. It was not just about meeting expectations, it was about surpassing them and continuously setting new benchmarks for myself. In elementary school, I didn’t settle for average. I was the student who eagerly took on additional assignments out of a genuine thirst for knowledge. I volunteered to participate in the school science fair when I was 9 years old, being one out of 6 students in my grade to participate. I created a presentation focusing on how smoking cigarettes impacts lung health because I have several family members who smoke, with a goal to utilize the presentation as a tool to motivate them to quit.

    At age 11, I resolved to pursue healthcare after caring for my chronically ill grandpa, providing him with medication, aiding in daily tasks, and managing his oxygen needs. His encouragement, “One day, you will be a great doctor,” fueled my ambition. In high school, I immersed myself into rigorous courses, including honors and AP, while volunteering at a local hospitals’ maternal services department. There, I supported nursing staff, focusing on delivering high quality patient care to ensure postpartum happiness. This experience taught me the value of patient-centered care. Juggling these roles honed my time management and prioritization skills.

    As a first generation college student in my undergraduate years, I delved into demanding courses with a major in biochemistry while nurturing my passion for medicine. This led me to set my sights on medical school. Amidst the pandemic’s limitations on shadowing physicians, I took the initiative in my junior year to become a medical scribe in the emergency department (ED). Working there alongside diverse healthcare professionals was an eye-opening experience.

    During my time as an ED scribe, I discovered the role of physician associates (PAs) and witnessed the crucial contribution of every healthcare team member to patient care, and during this time, my mind wrestled with PA vs MD. As a scribe, I learned about bedside manner, documentation, healthcare system intricacies, patient assessment, physical exams, and developing differential diagnosis. Working across different specialities, including family medicine (in an urgent care setting), emergency medicine, and psychiatry, I adeptly switch between charting styles and workflows, from charting for rounds in psychiatry to charting for critical patients in the ED. The lateral mobility of the PA profession ultimately captivated me, offering ongoing learning across different specialties, skill expansion, networking opportunities, and potential career growth.

    After a year of scribing, I was promoted to scribe ambassador, where I trained new scribes, reviewed their charts, and offered feedback. A year later, I accepted a leadership position and became the Associate Chief Scribe-Quality Assurance Associate (QAA). In this position, I collaborated with the chief scribe to uphold high documentation standards, ensure regulatory compliance, initiate quality improvements projects, and support scribe training for optimal performance. My experience as QAA emphasized the importance of well-being in the workplace, prompting me to implement wellness initiatives like snacks, breaks, and monthly wellness surveys for the scribe team in order to optimize their performance. Working closely with a psychiatrist who emphasized life quality influenced my decision to pursue the PA profession for a better work-life balance compared to the lengthy education path of becoming a physician.

    One of my driving motivations to become a PA stems from my desire to connect with patients on a profound level, adapting to their individual needs while providing education and support. An instance that vividly highlighted the adaptability and patient-centered approach of PAs occurred when I witnessed a PA tailor their care to meet a patient’s unique circumstances more effectively than a physician. I was working with a physician in urgent care, when there was a significant number of patients waiting to be seen. My doctor’s main focus was moving the department and seeing as many patients as possible in a short period of time, while the PA did not feel responsible for moving the department, and therefore spent more time with patients. This experience reinforced my belief in the collaborative and personalized care that PAs offer. Additionally, my time as a volunteer for the Crisis Text Line deeply resonated with me as I found immense fulfillment in being a source of support for individuals during their most challenging moments. This experience solidified my commitment to being there for patients in every possible way, further fueling my aspiration to become a compassionate and dedicated PA.

    One of the aspects that attracted me to the PA role is the opportunity to play a crucial role in healthcare teams. As a scribe, I thrive as a team player, actively engaging in discussions on patient histories, differential diagnoses, procedure documentation, etc. The collaborative nature of PAs resonates with my goal of making meaningful contributions to patient care while benefiting from the expertise of fellow healthcare professionals. Working in conjunction with another health care professional with the ability to bounce care plans and medical plans off of one another is what I want in medicine.

    The continuous learning aspect further motivated my choice to pursue a PA career. A recent attending physician I work with, fresh out of residency, once said to me “I miss the constant learning during residency; now I am the one teaching.” Observing conversations between PAs and physicians and engaging in lectures has fueled my enthusiasm for ongoing learning. I actively seek out learning opportunities, knowing that as a PA, I will have a career that prioritizes continuous growth and development.

    My experience as a medical scribe not only expanded my healthcare knowledge, but also introduced me to the vital role of PAs in patient care. Seeing PAs deliver comprehensive care, collaborate across healthcare teams, and navigate various medical specialties deeply resonated with my passion for impactful healthcare contributions. The lateral mobility, continuous learning, and teamwork emphasized by the PA profession perfectly align with my career goals and eagerness to make a real difference in patient’s lives. This blend of clinical adaptability, lifelong learning, and collaborative patient-centered care fuels my pursuit of becoming a PA.

    Throughout my academic and professional journey, I have consistently pursued excellence and demonstrated a strong work ethic. As someone who has spent most of my life striving to achieve goals, I am self-motivated and determined to succeed in the challenging yet rewarding field of healthcare. My leadership role as an associate chief scribe has further honed my organizational skills, attention to detail, and ability to adapt to diverse situations—all essential qualities for a successful PA.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 7:23 pm

      Hanaa,
      You effectively describe what appeals to you about the PA profession. I suggest eliminating the discussion about MD/PA as this will give you more characters to focus on your journey toward PA. Also, you may want to avoid discussing work/life balance and the shorter school duration as this sometimes comes across as self-serving. In addition, I would be careful about how you discuss the physician’s faster pace as this may seem like you are criticizing another provider. Lastly, I suggest including a patient care story that shows you in action connecting with a patient while providing care of some kind. You may need to condense somewhat throughout your essay to include this paragraph.
      Should you need more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Hanaa.

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14. Nia says

    April 4, 2024 at 4:49 pm

    My journey toward becoming a physician assistant was profoundly shaped by my uncle Umar. His sudden diagnosis of encephalitis during my highschool years led my family to transfer him from Indonesia to Singapore and finally to Seattle. Witnessing his frail helpless state, I was exposed to the compassionate efforts of doctors, nurses and PAs as they administered medications and monitored his vitals throughout the course of his treatment.
    Although saddened by the lack of skills I had at the time to assist my uncle, this experience ignited my passion for understanding medical diagnoses and providing compassionate care to those facing similar challenges and to those in need.
    Initially, my aspirations were limited to becoming a physician, as I was unaware of the diverse career paths in healthcare. However, my perspective shifted when I discovered the role of physician assistants. It was through my experiences that I was introduced to the remarkable work of compassionate and dedicated PAs that I wanted to emulate.
    During college as a first generation immigrant and an out- of- state student with severe testing anxiety, I faced challenges. including working late nights at the school dining hall to cover expenses, resulting in lower grades. Despite these setbacks, I preserved through attending office hours and forming study groups, gradually overcoming my testing anxiety. My unwavering determination led to improved grades and the confidence to pursue my dream of entering the healthcare field.
    Additionally, I actively engaged in various clubs and organizations, further igniting my passion for healthcare. As the treasurer of the Minority Association of Pre-Medical Students, I helped organize an event called Dia de Salud. An event aimed at increasing health equity in the Latino community. Through volunteering, I had the opportunity to make an impact by assisting individuals with high blood pressure, diabetes and other health concerns. I learned essential skills such as taking vitals (blood pressure, a1cs) and educating patients on the importance of healthy eating. An aspect of preventative measures PAs use when assisting their patients.
    Fast forward to the Covid 19 pandemic where I became an Admissions Service Coordinator at Seattle Children’s Emergency Department. While working as an ASC, I gained first-hand experience in the fast paced environment of healthcare. I learned the importance of quick service, quality of care and teamwork when it came to registering pediatric patients to their rooms alongside 4-5 other ASCs. Coordinated X-rays with staff members and scheduled urgent care follow ups when prompted. I also ensured the comfort of the young patients and their families by providing snacks, blankets and anything that would make their stay comfortable. While I appreciated the opportunity for the exposure to the healthcare world, I had a strong desire to have a more direct impact when it came to patient care besides paging for a physician or physician assistant.
    My time as an ASC was essential to my journey as I learned to emphasize patient- centered care and reinforced my passion for making a difference in patient’s lives. Ultimately, motivating me to pursue a role that had direct patient care experience and attend PA School in the future where I am involved in diagnosing patients and formulating treatment plants to address their concerns.
    After obtaining my medical assistant certification and working in both primary care and Sports and Spine speciality, I gained valuable insights into patient care and developed a deeper appreciation for the healthcare profession. One of the most impactful aspects of my time in primary care was working closely with PAs like Brian and Chang. They exemplified dedication and compassion when it came to their patient care. They both consistently provided thorough explanations to their patients’ concerns, answered questions their patients may have and ensured that their patients were all treated with respect and made sure they felt heard. Witnessing their dedication and commitment to delivering high quality care further fueled my dream to become a PA.
    Through gaining these insights into patient care and witnessing PAs like Brian and Chang, I was eager to apply what I had learned to my own patient interactions at Swedish Sports and Spine. One memorable experience involved patient A, an 81 year old who presented to the clinic with bilateral knee osteoarthritis. Over the course of a year, I took on various responsibilities from taking A’s vitals, to preparing medications, and ensuring a sanitized environment for her injections. Despite my dedicated efforts, her insurance persistently denied the proposed hyaluronic acid treatment plan.
    Similarly, a patient came in hesitant to receive her knee injections as I was helping her position herself on the table, I saw her eyes were full of fear, and her hands were shaking. I saw how anxious she was, so I stayed in the room to provide some support. I reassured her throughout the procedure and let her know that she could hold on to my hand as tightly as she needed and to let me or the provider know that if at any moment she needed to stop, we would stop. Bravely, the patient grabbed my hand and the procedure went smoothly despite a couple of screams. In this role, I learned to comfort and support patients with empathy and kindness, traits that I aim to carry forward in my career as a physician assistant.
    Ultimately, the autonomy to diagnose patients, collaborate with healthcare teams and follow patients through their full course of treatment entices me towards a career as a physician assistant. Being a PA represents the culmination of my experiences, aspirations and dedication to making a meaningful impact in healthcare

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 6:58 pm

      Nia,
      You effectively describe how your interest in medicine developed and why you decided to pursue the PA path. In addition, your story about offering support to your patient spotlights some of the qualities that will make you an effective PA.
      I suggest moving the discussion about grades to the paragraph before your conclusion. While I think it is wise to address this, shifting the location allows you to set up the positive aspects of your journey first. In addition, I think you meant to type the word persevered in the second paragraph. Also, high school is two words. 🙂
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Nia.

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15. Caitlin Prifti says

    April 3, 2024 at 12:21 pm

    Hi everyone, I just finished my first draft of my personal statement. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated, thank you for reading!

    From a young girl, the calluses, bruises, and messy bun were a part of my identity. I struggled with simple algebra or naming the 13 colonies, but with a leotard on, the drive to challenge myself never faded. As high school was approaching, my attention soon became balanced between gymnastics and the subject that challenged me the most: science.

    Like gymnastics, the world of science allowed me to further challenge my mind; as my desire to get a perfect score grew stronger, so did my desire to learn more about my body and how it was able to endure such backbreaking tricks. That was until, what my 14 year old self would say, “was the worst day of her life,” where that one trick did indeed do some “backbreaking” damage. With a new leotard in hand and a rush of excitement ready to be expended, the happy moment ended in a not so happy fracture to my fifth metatarsal. X-ray after X-ray landed me with a shiny new rainbow cast and hours that previously were devoted to running and flipping, to hours focused on physical therapy and how to strategically pick up marbles with my toes. Overtime, appointments transformed from being viewed as a punishment to a place where my fascination with the wonders of the human body was able to blossom.

    It wasn’t until a few years later – no longer a gymnast but a full time college student working as a Perioperative/PACU technician – did my attention for medicine become fully hooked. For some, the chaos to ensure all patients head to the OR on time may be overwhelming, but for me, it is pure excitement and exhilaration. One case allowed my capabilities to be in full motion: a patient scheduled for a cystoscopy and urethral dilation experienced an emergency closure due to what is known as an atrial flutter. Jumping at the chance, I stepped in alongside the team to connect the patient to the monitors and conduct an EKG straight out of the OR. With no past exposure to this condition, the anesthesiologist explained it as a rapid electrical circuit in the atrium causing tachycardia and strain to the heart if untreated immediately. As the team proceeded to the next case, the PA however, took the time to dissect the cardiogram to the patient, emphasizing the unidentifiable P waves and repeating depolarization activity, the culprit for such elevated atrial rates. The PA’s empathetic demeanor and dedicated efforts towards the patient were attributes I admired greatly and aim to obtain as a clinician. This case, despite having no previous exposure to the condition, highlighted my ability to work as a team, responsibly navigate unexpected events, and observe traits that make a well-rounded clinician.

    The exposure to the physician assistant profession did not stop there: that same year, I was given the opportunity to shadow an intensive care unit PA. On my first day, I was met with a patient who was scheduled to undergo an organ transplant surgery of his lungs, kidneys, and liver. Faced with this once in a lifetime opportunity to observe a gift of life surgery, it took no hesitance to accept this career altering moment. 3 am struck the clock, surgical attire on, and an adrenaline rush that could not be tamed, I stood alongside the procurement team to watch each intricate step that made this gift of life transplant a reality for the patients waiting on the other end. As the incision, starting from the abdomen and working up through the sternum grew, so did my anticipation to see the core of every human’s entire being – the heart. Beating in full motion, the ability for the team to work their magic whilst protecting this treasure displayed what true teamwork is, an aspect of the medical field that sometimes is lost. Observing this surgery and the team’s shared pride, further reinforced my purpose and dedication to one day saving lives like they did.

    My years of blood, sweat, and tears as a gymnast taught me that first place is not just about winning the trophy, but is about recognizing the small achievements and self growth that made that win possible. The qualities acquired throughout my gymnastics career parallel those that make a great physician assistant: if one cannot take initiative, stay driven, and have the courage to run towards a challenge, then the ability to make a difference will not be possible. This profession encapsulates what it truly means to, like Simone Biles says, compete against your self doubts and prove you are meant to stand in this position, and while some believe wearing their hearts on their sleeves make them vulnerable, wearing mine allows me to recognize my personal gift of standing as a compassionate, dedicated, and competent individual determined to extend her hand to anyone in need.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 1:37 pm

      Caitlin,
      Your tenacity threads throughout your essay.
      I suggest including more details about what specifically appeals to you about the PA profession.
      Also, include any clinical skills and work experience you have gained that has prepared you for a rigorous PA program. I would also describe a patient care story that reveals some of the qualities that will make you an effective PA.
      Should you want more help, we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Caitlin.

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16. Ying says

    March 30, 2024 at 4:57 pm

    “Good! We need more PAs”, Dr. Sheri Spunt resolutely said as we were walking out of the room of a young girl that just learned she had cancer. This was one of my first patient visits when I was just starting as a medical scribe. My eyes watered when the patient and her mother were understandably in tears throughout the conversation. This was one of many emotionally heavy conversations I observed providers having with patients. However, in such moments, my own sadness turned into the determination to write the best note I have ever written, and it was this determination I felt for the first time that made this particular visit so memorable. I periodically joined in for her visits throughout her treatment, and now she is thriving in life in remission. Before that remark, Dr. Spunt had asked me what my plan was after being a scribe. Of course I understood she was not just talking about our pediatric oncology clinic specifically needing more PAs, but she was speaking more for the wider medical community.

    I understand why, especially when I still see physicians overpacking their schedules with more patients than what a normal schedule would allow for, which heavily undermines the importance of quality face-to-face time between a provider and a patient. As a scribe, I witness the significant support that PAs provide towards the physicians that they work with. They are a crucial link in the close relationships between the patient, their family, and their entire care team. PAs reduce the load off of physicians by helping them examine the patients, entertaining the bored kids, entering orders, and writing the progress note all while the physicians focus on discussing the treatment plan in more detail with the families. As a member of the care team myself, I am proud that I can help PAs write the progress note. One of the hardest notes I can write is a new patient note where the patient’s history is entirely unknown to me, but also up to me to piece together from the chart. It takes me several hours to write one, so I cannot imagine how much precious time a provider has to spend on one. This is all worth it when a PA trusts my abilities and is comfortable asking me to draft a challenging note for a new patient with an extensive medical history. This feeling of being able to support the providers is what makes my job as a scribe truly rewarding. Aside from being a humble support role to a physician, PAs are able to quickly transition to the role of a compassionate leader. I envision myself as a PA establishing tight bonds with patients, since they are the ones seeing the patients more often than the physicians, even several times a week when the patients come for treatment. I smile seeing the eyes of patients light up when they see PAs walk into their rooms, and they immediately begin reminiscing on the fun events over the weekend. I also see PAs consoling patients and their worried families when patients are not feeling well. I admire how PAs professionally address the concerns and quickly come up with a plan to ease the symptoms, or in tricky situations, work together with a physician to devise a plan. One major aspect of the PA profession that attracts me is that PAs have the opportunity to learn from the professionals they work with, and they have the versatility to work across various specialties to further improve their skills of providing better patient care.

    I hold strongly to this mindset of constant improvement. Throughout college, I sought out opportunities allowing me to improve on my leadership skills, such as helping students transition into college by being an Orientation Leader, or facilitating the Integrative Medicine DeCal, a course that showcases how “health” can be applied through many different practices. This course was significant in that it led me to the discovery of the PA profession. To gain more experience in healthcare, I became a Quality Assurance Assistant handling medical records in a pediatric psychology clinic. Later, I advanced to becoming a scribe, where I can observe patient-provider interactions. There were numerous times as a scribe where I had the urge to answer questions for the families because I was staring straight at the answer on my computer, but the nature of my role as a mute scribe did not allow for these interactions. Thus, in this past year since I applied to PA programs, I found a role as a clinical assistant working closely with plastic surgeons to provide quality care for our patients. Here, I am a crucial part of our patients’ treatment journey, overseeing all aspects of their care from being a new patient to surgery and beyond.

    There was never a single moment that I knew I wanted to be a PA, rather it was an accumulation of all of my past experiences and my understanding of this profession that solidified this aspiration. My hope is to become a PA as a part of an exemplary healthcare team that works together to provide the highest standard of care to our patients.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 1:15 pm

      Ying,
      You do a good job of revealing how PAs expand care and connect with patients. With that said, you may want to omit your comments about doctors overbooking patients so that it doesn’t appear that you are criticizing physicians.
      I suggest including a patient care story from your role as a clinical assistant. Show yourself in action providing clinical care of some kind while connecting with a patient on a personal level. You want to demonstrate how this role has prepared you to take the next step while spotlighting some of the qualities that will make you an effective PA.
      I wish you good luck, Ying. Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.

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17. brea simpson says

    March 28, 2024 at 7:26 am

    I’ve always had a zeal for helping others. No singular moment compelled me to become a physician assistant, but the culmination of these events throughout my life has led me to aspire to be a PA.
    My mom has always been my inspiration, as she suffers with chronic illnesses such as Type 1 Diabetes, fibromyalgia, arthritis, and a herniated disc causing pain. Growing up, I did not always have my mom present due to her health struggles, causing her to miss out on milestones. While on family vacation at the age of seven, my mom’s blood sugar dropped low enough to cause her to seize, waking up our family with her body hitting the condo floor. I remember thinking this incident was a nightmare. Most children at this age do not even know what glucose levels are, let alone how to administer a glucagon pen or watch for signs of low/high blood sugar. However, I had to learn this information at a young age to ensure my mom’s safety in the future. Because of my mom, every patient I care for I picture it being her and provide the utmost care.
    Another defining moment transpired at the age of eight, when during recess my friend’s pant leg got tangled on a foothold on the climbing wall and I rushed to get help to rescue her. Due to this incident, I have always prepared for the unexpected and to respond in an urgent manner when needed. As a PA, I know I will need to be able to respond to my patients’ needs with this same preparedness and urgency.
    At the age of ten years old, I learned that my cousin, Harley, was diagnosed with Autism, and would need special care throughout his lifetime. Being an only child at the time, I felt it was my role to be his protector, thus I do respite care and volunteer for those with disabilities. Seeing my cousin talk, write, or even play sports has shown me to never underestimate someone due to their disability or difference. These experiences with my cousin have helped shape the care I provide my patients, allowing me to connect to them on a deeper level and understand how best to provide care.
    While away at summer camp, I received the news that my grandpa was in a coma and unlikely to recover. Seeing my grandpa in a hospital bed intubated and unconscious taught me the importance of patient education and that health is a blessing not a guarantee. If he had only known the symptoms he was experiencing were a sign of kidney failure, then this may have been prevented. This experience with my grandpa taught me to never take one’s health for granted, and the importance of educating patients on symptoms of common diseases to help identify when something is wrong with themselves.
    As a sixteen year old lifeguard, I rescued a drowning child and performed compressions on his tiny frail body. At this moment, It was up to me to resuscitate this child and keep him alive until EMS arrived. Watching a child who swam too deep and couldn’t save himself or be saved by his parents left an unsettling feeling. Sometimes circumstances are out of our control, but the way we respond is entirely up to us.
    Previously, my professor assigned my class to present a research paper on any topic. Without hesitation, I chose to research and present the topic “Why Healthcare Should be Accessible for All People”, which revealed my passion for advocating for others. I will serve as an advocate for my patient’s needs and concerns as a PA. At the minimum, even if I cannot find a solution, my patients will know that I care about them and will continue to advocate for them.
    Working in the ED, I experience many emotions and situations that are unimaginable. But one that stuck was seeing the relief on a family’s face being notified their child was stable after being involved in a fatal crash. Providing patients and their families with support, hope, and closure is something I will do daily as a PA. Recognizing the mere effect I had on the patient’s life being part of the care team is something that I never forget and why I keep doing what I do.
    Recently, my own health deteriorated from depression, anxiety, and ADHD, leaving me to experience the importance of a positive patient-provider relationship. Anne Parrish PA-C is a provider that helps care for patients in more ways than meets the eye. From being a shoulder to cry on or sharing her cell number to me, this relationship has inspired me to treat my patients likewise helping both their physical and mental health.
    All these experiences have contributed to fuel my passion for my future as a PA. Caring for others is something that’s come natural for me, and I always find myself choosing others’ needs over my own. I strive to be the voice for someone unheard. I want to be the motion for someone neglected or dismissed. The answer for something unknown and to be determined. I hope to be a provider that intends to do more than give medical care to patients but to build a relationship and support them. I may not be able to save all the world’s problems, find a cure for Type 1 Diabetes, or save every patient but I hope to make an impact, contribute to change, understand, and empathize with each person I care for.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 12:51 pm

      Brea,
      Your desire to assist patients shines throughout your essay.
      I suggest condensing somewhat so that you can include more details about what specifically appeals to you about the PA profession over another type of provider.
      I would also spotlight some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained throughout your different roles. You want to show how each job has prepared you for a rigorous PA program.
      I also suggest omitting your comments about depression/anxiety. Sadly, many uninformed people make judgments regarding this topic, so at this point in the process, I would not include those comments.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Brea.

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18. Dania says

    March 25, 2024 at 10:13 pm

    On January 7th, 2020, the day of my long awaited 18th birthday, an unexpected turn of events transformed what was meant to be a day of celebration into a pivotal moment in my life. As I sat in my highschool calculus course amidst my fellow peers, routinely discussing last night’s homework assignment, the chatter abruptly came to a halt as my calculus teacher, Mr. Dressel, collapsed to the floor. Silence radiated amongst the class for what felt like minutes as Mr. Dressel lay lifeless on the floor. Panic rippled through the class as I lunged toward Mr. Dressel, and with steady hands and a racing heart I began to perform CPR. Each compression assisting in the return of his circulation, as Mr. Dressel gasped for air, his pulse returning. That defining moment ignited an infatuation within me, a desire for healthcare and the immediate impact of medical interventions.

    As my interest in medicine developed, I became increasingly enthralled by instantaneous medical interventions and the prominence of medical science within the healthcare system. While on my EMT field rotation, I observed the transformative ability of medical involvement in the life of an elderly patient who had been sitting in the waiting room of the emergency department. The elderly man had been waiting patiently to be admitted into triage for reasons unbeknownst to me, when I caught sight of alarming symptoms from across the waiting room. The elderly man had begun to slur his speech in an incomprehensible manner as well as possessed a one-sided facial droop. Detecting these symptoms from a far, I immediately recognized these textbook stroke indications, allowing me to rush to the elderly man’s side. Alerting those around me for assistance, I was able to secure the elderly man into a wheelchair and promptly deliver him to the interprofessional medical team in triage.The swift action taken that day by myself as well as other medical professionals ultimately saved the elderly man’s life. The immediate impact of medical interference on the elderly man only further bloomed my deep-seated vigor for medicine.

    My initial exposure to the physician assistant (PA) profession coincided with my hiring as a patient care technician (PCT) on a stem cell transplant oncology unit. The introduction to the career arose from conversing with an interdisciplinary oncology team, made up of physicians and advanced practice providers (APPs), lending the subjection to the collaborative regard of the position. My continued presence as a PCT has allowed me to emerge myself into the world of healthcare and gain the essential skill set of communication across healthcare teams to provide outstanding medical care. My time shadowing a PA on the stem cell transplant unit encompassed a continuous learning environment, as the PA was encouraged to question treatment options as well as utilize fellow interdisciplinary colleagues to attain the optimal medical regimen for each specific patient. The yearning for knowledge and supplementary skills shown by the PA have guided me to possess a certification in phlebotomy, allowing me to expand my expertise. While shadowing, an encounter between the PA and a leukemia patient demonstrated the practical aspect of the occupation. The leukemia patient, who I will call Sue, appeared to grow disheartened by the progressing diagnosis of her leukemia, the PA having noticed Sue’s changed demeanor, instantly pauses reading her medical chart. The PA puts a hand on Sue’s shoulder and begins to comfort her while addressing all her apprehensions, allowing Sue to fully comprehend her diagnosis while eliminating the uneasiness that was initially present. This eye-opening illustration of empathy as well as the well-rounded practice of medicine and compassion continues to propel my inclination for the PA profession.

    The indispensable role of PAs emanates from the lateral mobility of the profession, allowing PAs to train as generalists while also having the unique flexibility to specialize in areas of interest, which encourages a varied skill set to take advantage of. This came to light when I shadowed a neuro-epilepsy PA in an out-pateint clinical setting, as the PA had previously worked in an emergency department 15 years prior, thus allowing the PA to use previous experiences and knowledge to enhance care with lateral mobility. While shadowing, I was able to detect the autonomy of the PA profession, as the PA was able to diagnose neurological deficits within patients as well as prescribe medications for epilepsy control when required, displaying the independent role of the PA in the healthcare system, while also having the capability to discuss medical treatment with a supervising physician. Exposure to a neurological based specialty has emerged my passion for mental health and those in crisis, leading to my current position as a crisis hotline volunteer. As a volunteer, I am able to anonymously communicate with those in crisis, building on my communication and empathy skills in and out of a hospital setting as well as providing advice and resources for further treatment. These are all qualities that make PAs inherently significant providers within the medical field.

    Choosing the PA profession is a decision embedded in a passion for healthcare commemorated by meaningful and valuable experiences. As I reflect on my journey and the experiences that have led me to the profession, I am confident in my decision to pursue a career as a PA. Every skill I have learned will help aid in my career as a PA as well as the prospects to come. I am committed and eager to commence on this rewarding path to serving patients and contributing to the medical field by becoming a physician assistant.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 12:37 pm

      Dania,
      Your introduction grabs the reader’s attention immediately as well as reveals your ability to remain calm in an emergency.
      I suggest including some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained in your time as a PCT.
      Your sentences describing your shadowing experience can stand as their own paragraph.
      In your conclusion, you may want to tie back to your intro in some way. Lastly, high school is two words. 🙂
      I wish you good luck. Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.

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19. Brooke Smiley says

    March 23, 2024 at 11:04 am

    Hello! I just finished the first draft of my personal statement, and I would love some feedback. Anything helps(:

    If I have learned one thing from working in patient care, it’s that people are lonely. Everyday, I greet a patient, and I can tell they have not seen anyone smile yet that day. My immediate impulse is to smile as wide as I can. I ask them how their morning is, and say their name after I tell them it’s nice to meet them. I believe something as simple as saying a patient’s name is enough to make them feel seen. It’s enough to make someone who has potentially many concerns and anxieties about their health feel as though they are not alone. As providers, the ability to make others feel validated and supported is imperative. An empathetic provider is one who practices good medicine. Medicine is not only about human biology, it is about the entirety of the human experience.
    During my time as a caregiver, I discovered a gentleness in myself I had not seen before. Those who know me well may describe me as kind or empathetic. My nature has always been outgoing and curious. I have a voice that carries and an unwavering confidence behind everything that I do. However, as a caregiver, a new aspect of my personality came to light. I found myself in a state of calmness during my shifts. I became a better sympathizer and my capacity for patience grew substantially. I spent more time listening to the patients, even when their words did not make any sense. I learned to focus on my tone and body language as the patients in the memory care unit were often defensive and easily agitated due to their illness. In doing the difficult tasks of cleaning and caring for elderly dementia patients, I was fulfilled by the selflessness of the work I was doing. I knew that I was helping someone’s mother or husband. I left every shift feeling like what I had done that day mattered, regardless of the emotional weight it put on me.
    When I reflect on my time as a medical assistant, it becomes apparent to me how different it is from being a caregiver. As a medical assistant, one is expected to not only be kind and considerate to patients, but also mediate situations in which emotions can be tense. When someone’s health is in question, it is easy for them to become irrational and emotional. I have learned how to function as a sounding board for patients when they need someone to appease their anxieties and offer them educated advice on how to approach their health with an open mind and an optimistic attitude. While I use the skills I learned as a caretaker in my career as a medical assistant, I have also learned new ways to stand up for myself and the provider I work for. While medicine requires one to have empathy, it equally requires strength and confidence. Having direct patient interaction with different types of people everyday has taught me how to navigate difficult conversations and unkind words in a way I never thought I would be able to do. I have learned to keep my composure and remain kind, even when a patient may not be giving me the same courtesy.
    I contain all of the aspects of what a medical provider should be. I am gentle and calming, yet sure of myself and my abilities. I can bring humor into a room, but still remain sensitive to a patient’s concerns and feelings. I am approachable and understanding while still willing to give honest advice. I crave direct contact and conversation with other people to fill me up. I believe that human relationships are what makes life worth living. I want to live everyday as a confidant and an advocate for health. I want to be a physician’s assistant more than anything, and I know that I will make an honest provider who practices medicine with justice and morality. I will place the patient’s needs first while still allowing them to be in control of their own health.

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    • Lun says

      March 24, 2024 at 5:26 pm

      The first time I thought I had seen an angel was when my family lived in Malaysia to escape religious persecution from the country of Myanmar. Here, mom had to get an emergency appendectomy and this became a pivotal moment in my career aspirations. Though we were filled with anxiety and unrest because of our limited knowledge of medicine, I felt a sense of peace with her medical providers. Despite the language and cultural barriers, the determination and kindness of the medical professionals did not cease. As a little girl, I wanted to be like those hero-like figures who went above and beyond to care for my mom.
      Upon moving to the United States, my family did not know any English and this brought challenges in our new life. In the early years of our resettlement, doctor visits took up a lot of our time. I quickly noticed the gap in culture and language, especially the way it impacted the quality of healthcare. Such a gap existed that my parents could not communicate their health concerns as clearly as they wanted. At just nine years old, I started translating for my parents at doctors’ appointments but it was difficult knowing that I could not explain the depth of their maladies. The challenging nature of the situation often led to us leaving many appointments without a thorough diagnosis or treatment. Each visit seemed to leave us with more drugs, more frustration, and less hope.
      Although I was grateful for vast opportunities of medical care, growing up in rural Gettysburg, I became aware of the effects of the gap in culture and language in patient-provider interactions. Though we had the ease of access to healthcare in our new life, we were not able to utilize this new privilege to its full capacity. The lack of shared life experiences between my family and the doctors we saw further widened the ability to relate and to be understood by them. Early on, I recognized that if I wanted to break these barriers, I would need to rise to the occasion to represent Zomi Burmese Americans and minorities alike within the medical field.
      From a young age, I worked hard in school and eventually pursued a degree in biological sciences at the University of Pittsburgh. I knew this would be the doorway into the medical field, though I was unsure of what kind of career I wanted. This became clear to me as I discovered the Physician Assistant (PA) profession through my advisor my freshman year of college. Moreover, as I worked diverse patient care jobs, I found confirmation pursuing a career as a Physician Assistant. As I worked alongside PA’s in the field of emergency medicine and dermatology, I grew to admire the ways their role differentiated them from other healthcare providers. I appreciated the diversity of specialities that PAs were able to work in and the flexibility to curate a challenging yet meaningful career. Knowing that as a PA I could adapt in ways to help to meet dynamic healthcare needs is encouraging. Furthermore, in the dermatology clinic, I observed the ample patient contact that PAs are able to have which allowed them to build meaningful relationships with their patients. This opportunity to invest in patients beyond medical care is what I believe is key to bridging the gap I once saw in healthcare as a young girl.
      When I think about myself as a PA in the future, I’m brought back to the doctor’s office. As I walk into the exam room, I see a little girl and her mother smiling up at me as they sit closely next to each other. I can tell that there is much hope in their smiles and my heart softens at the familiarity of the situation. I smile at the joy of knowing that I have been prepared for moments like this, and I am curious to hear their story. My multicultural identity and upbringing has taught me to be adaptable to changes, resilient in trials and empathetic in suffering. Having endured through adversity and the challenges of immigration, I know that investing in my education to be a PA is an investment to the medical care of minority and immigrant groups.

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      • Whitney Prosperi says

        March 29, 2024 at 10:03 am

        Lun,
        You tell your family’s story so beautifully. You also effectively reveal the reasons why you’re compelled to pursue the PA path. I recommend including some of the clinical experience and medical knowledge you gained in your roles. Also, to show some of the qualities you possess that will make you an effective PA, recount a patient care story that shows you in action providing clinical care while connecting with a patient on a personal level. Lastly, I would describe any shadowing experience you have. Should you want more help, remember that we are taking essay submissions for our revision service. I wish you good luck, Lun.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      March 30, 2024 at 9:22 am

      Brooke,
      You do a good job of showing your soft skills gained throughout your different roles. I suggest including some of the medical knowledge and clinical skills you have gained.
      Also, include details about what exactly appeals to you about the PA profession over another type of provider role. (the ability to switch specialties, working independently as well as with a supervising physician, more time/contact with patients) You may want to describe how you discovered and decided on the PA path.
      If you have shadowing experience, include what you observed through that and how it solidified your decision.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
      Good luck to you, Brooke.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      April 9, 2024 at 12:14 pm

      Brooke,
      Your compassion shines throughout your essay.
      I suggest condensing somewhat so that you can include other crucial elements that spotlight what drew you to the PA path. Describe specifically what appeals to you about the profession over another type of provider. Is it the ability to switch specialties, more time with patients, or working with a supervising physician?
      Also, include some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained throughout your roles.
      If you have had any shadowing experience, describe how that solidified your decision.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Brooke.

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20. Bri says

    March 20, 2024 at 8:19 pm

    Hello! I’ve just finished the first draft of my personal statement so it is very rough. I would appreciate any suggestions on what I can do improve and if it is engaging or not. Thank you for help and I appreciate any and all suggestions!

    I wish I could say I always knew what I wished to be when I grew up. The question always seemed so trivial and out of reach from my thinking. It worried me that I did not have all the answers for my future endeavors as in my assignments. I had naturally gravitated towards human biology, and thus healthcare. Yet, I continuously had trouble finding my place. It was not until I dove in that I realized that the reason behind my uncertainty was due to lack of exposure. Embarking as a Certified Nursing Assistant (CNA) and medical scribe/medical assistant (MA) provided me with the valuable opportunity to intimately observe and collaborate cohesively with several incredible medical professionals in their element. Their thinking process for the betterment of the patient was all at my disposal to learn from. From the common cold to near death due to anaphylaxis shock, I have realized that in healthcare, it is a hard concept to grasp when something incomprehensible is happening to your own body. It is when someone gazes at you tearfully, begging for help and longing for clarity as their mind is conjuring the worst scenario possible. But it is also when someone comes in the room to take charge and assure you that everything is going to be okay with a ready-made plan of care, that you receive your “Aha” moment. My once unanswered question had become clear. This and other irreplaceable interactions solidified my decision to become a Physician Assistant as I craved to be the person to make sense of what did not.

    Throughout my experience, the PA career with its philosophy rooted in the medical model has continuously captured my attention. My current work mirrors the nursing model and while I have immensely enjoyed forming connections with the patients, my ultimate desire lies in the frontlines of patient care in a greater role. Being a PA allows for a provider-patient relationship where I can solely focus on their care and treatment plan. This suits my personality greatly as I would prefer getting to the cause and using my knowledge to find the desired answer. I found myself longing to provide the diagnosis and be a teacher of the body so that my patients would be properly informed. With rigorous investigation of medical history, lab findings, symptom assessment, and more, I can direct the plan of care in the proper direction.

    Here in my journey, my mind wrestled with PA and MD. Further research into the PA profession as well as observing both professions has led PAs to become the ultimate winner. Lateral mobility and the continuous learning of the profession were an aspect I immensely admired. I thoroughly enjoy growing in my education, so this allows me the constant reassurance that my mind will continuously be stimulated by ongoing learning and not become still. Horizontal career flexibility provides knowledge in a wide spectrum of specialties within the medical profession. This grants me the opportunity to move across specialties to continuously grow intellectually. This appeals to me as someone who strives to learn, and this profession allows the promise of lifelong education. To achieve my goals, it would benefit me to embark on the PA education to allow me to readily serve in the medical profession promptly and still grant me the long-lasting impact I yearn to have on my patients and their care without the additional focus on departmental tasks.

    While shadowing, I have learned how valuable resources PAs are to the care team. I have found myself appreciating the level of responsibility and autonomy that PAs have on a day-to-day basis. As mid-level providers, PAs improve the timing and quality of care by being another source who are well-trained and knowledgeable in their respective areas. I have come to value the team-centered care the professions pride itself in. While I will have the opportunity of independence, there will be room for collaboration with a physician to properly reach the intended plan of care for the patient at hand. Furthermore, PAs increase access to care. As an Afro-Caribbean woman, this pleases me as we are often overlooked. As a PA, I will work to protect and serve my communities to ensure that they have access to the best quality of care that other communities receive.

    It is safe to say that many people want a career that is not only enjoyable, but fulfilling, and by becoming a PA, I will have the best of both worlds. It is no secret that pursuing a career in medicine will be the hardest challenge I have yet to face, but I certainly do not doubt that with perseverance and dedication to the profession and patients, I will prosper. So yes, I had once wished I had known what I wanted to be when I grew up. But now, as I embark on my journey into the world, I can confidently announce that I will become a PA to create my mark in the health professional world and provide clarity for others unknown.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      March 23, 2024 at 8:52 am

      Bri,
      Your desire to help patients shines throughout your essay. I suggest removing the language about not being sure what you wanted to be when you grew up and jumping straight into your professional journey. Spotlight some of your work thus far, including clinical skills and medical knowledge gained, and then move into your comments about wanting to do more for patients. Likewise, I suggest removing the discussion about PA/MD so you have more characters available to describe your journey toward the PA path.
      Also, I recommend describing a patient-care interaction that spotlights some of your skills in action and shows your ability to connect with a patient personally.
      You may want to describe a particular interaction that solidified your decision in your paragraph about shadowing.
      Lastly, physician assistant is not capitalized unless it begins a sentence. 🙂
      Remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service should you want more help. I wish you good luck, Bri.

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