The Physician Assistant Essay and Personal Statement Collaborative

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1. Tiana says

   July 1, 2023 at 1:02 pm

   *I added more to my original post, I hope this is the one!*
   My desire to pursue a career in the medical field began when I was young, just coming into middle school around the age of 12. This is when I was able to understand and recognize the crippling mental health and medical disabilities my father was battling. Struggling with the recovery from a debilitating back injury a few years prior, my father found comfort in opioids and alcohol. This lead to my parents divorce, which left me the only child, to help care for my father as much and as best as I could. I can still remember changing my fathers surgical dressings for him, trying to help him manage his medication and when to take it, and accompanying him to appointments. Many years of witnessing how he struggled, seeing doctor after doctor with no solution to his pain and countless surgeries, with little to no relief left me frustrated for him. Coming from a rural area, where the only source of medical treatment was a small clinic was also a struggle. The closest hospital was at least an hour away, with some specialty clinics being closer to two hours away. The source for treatment for my fathers pain coming from the small clinic was just more opioids rather than exploring other forms of treatment. Over the years my fathers health rapidly declined and he eventually passed in 2019. After many years of watching him in and out of hospitals and so many ICU visits, I would always think, “I wish he could make it until I could be his doctor”.

   When I was 14, my mother was extremely ill. She was in bed for many days and couldn’t walk, she kept telling me it was just the flu, eventually her coworker came to check on her while I was at school and called an ambulance. My mother had a blood clot in her left ventricle and she needed open heart surgery. When she was in the operating room and they sent a scope in to find the blood clot, it had disappeared and they never found it. While this was a wonderful miracle, I still have fears of this reoccurring. She suffers from scleroderma and is already a very fragile woman.

   With both of my parents having a wide array of medical history, I have always been exposed to the medical field. As I transitioned from middle school to high school and eventually going into college, I already knew my degree would be focused in medicine. Looking at my academic history my first few years of college were not my most proudest. My attention wasn’t where it needed to be, especially during classes my freshman year. I knew I wanted to study medicine, but I couldn’t quite figure out what direct path I wanted to take and my grades suffered from this confusion and frustration. I began researching different medical specialties and I came across physician assistant. As I researched further and realized how much can be accomplished and how wide the scope of practice goes with being a PA was, I knew I had finally found it, as there was so much and so many different medical and mental health topics I wanted to explore! As you can see from my more recent years in academia my grades improved. I repeated classes to not only refresh my memory, but to gain a better understanding than my previous attempts in the past where I didn’t give my best self. I also took classes such as substance abuse & dependence and family communication, to name a few, to help guide patients and families onto a path of healing and understanding of these topics, as I wish someone had done for me and my family. As you can also see, a degree I pursued and completed was Respiratory Care. I wanted to obtain this degree because it was something I felt would help me become a stronger physician assistant. After witnessing my father in the ICU being on ventilators multiple times and my mothers blood clot in her heart, I wanted to learn more about the cardiopulmonary system and the machines I saw so many times in the ICU. Carrying this understanding into my career as a physician assistant will make me that much stronger in my practice for my community and patients, and I will be a better asset to my medical team.

   The many years I have been pursing my degrees have also led me to have different types of medical experience. Being a CNA I witnessed many levels of patient care and I myself learned the care, compassion, and patience that goes into caring for patients. Seeing the PAs in the facility just further solidified my desire to become one. They have the benefit of working together with fellow PAs, nurses, and MDs to address and assess the best form of care for the patients. They are also greatly focused on the patient connections and spending quality time listening to their concerns. I felt this was such a desirable position to be in because it allowed for collaboration to any extent, and a focus on patient care without neglecting the human connection. During my time working as a CNA and as a scribe for a small family practice, I had the pleasure of caring for many patients and meet their families. During my time as a CNA I pursued further education in dementia and mental health specialty training to take my care to the next level for my patients. It brought me so much joy to hear throughout my day that my patients felt safe and heard with me, and their families would say they find comfort in knowing someone like me is going into medical practice. Something I’ve learned from different mentors and professors is when everyone is focused on the medical tests, stop and look at the patient and listen to them. A bond with the patient is one of the most important aspects of care.

   I recently was finally granted the ability to shadow a physician, since Covid had restricted this for many years. I have been able to observe PAs in action in the emergency department. I witnessed a PA work alongside an MD in assessing a trauma patient and the confidence in the team during the entire process was such pleasure to see. Seeing how the PA could tackle the task of a trauma, but still have the lead MD to consult with made me desire the position even more. Having the skills and ability to handle a situation on your own, but knowing you have someone you can go to for guidance makes me that much more confident when presented with such a duty. All of these combined experiences and exposure to healthcare have formed me into a disciplined, respectful, and passionate individual. My desire and drive to be the most dedicated and dependent PA for my community makes me eager to start this journey.

   My current position as a tissue recovery technician has made me really think about the position the donors were in before their passing. I have seen many different forms of death ranging from cardiac arrest to overdose to suicide. With these different types of medical or mental health conditions I always wonder what was being done for them or what could have been different. During the process of recovering grafts however, I have learned and been able to understand anatomy at a different level than before. Being able to have this position has taught me a new respect for death, but also thought’s of what could be better implemented in the field. I look forward to carrying all I have learned and the passion I have for being a physician assistant into my community, and to be the best team player I can be to my fellow colleagues.

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2. Tiana says

   July 1, 2023 at 12:17 am

   My desire to pursue a career in the medical field began when I was young, just coming into middle school around the age of 12. This is when I was able to understand and recognize the crippling mental health and medical disabilities my father was battling. Struggling with the recovery from a debilitating back injury a few years prior, my father found comfort in opioids and alcohol. This lead to my parents divorce, which left me the only child, to help care for my father as much and as best as I could. I can still remember changing my fathers surgical dressings for him, trying to help him manage his medication and when to take it, and accompanying him to appointments. Many years of witnessing how he struggled, seeing doctor after doctor with no solution to his pain and countless surgeries, with little to no relief left me frustrated for him. Coming from a rural area, where the only source of medical treatment was a small clinic was also a struggle. The closest hospital was at least an hour away, with some specialty clinics being closer to two hours away. The source for treatment for my fathers pain coming from the small clinic was just more opioids rather than exploring other forms of treatment. Over the years my fathers health rapidly declined and he eventually passed in 2019. After many years of watching him in and out of hospitals and so many ICU visits, I would always think, “I wish he could make it until I could be his doctor”.

   When I was 14, my mother was extremely ill. She was in bed for many days and couldn’t walk, she kept telling me it was just the flu, eventually her coworker came to check on her while I was at school and called an ambulance. My mother had a blood clot in her left ventricle and she needed open heart surgery. When she was in the operating room and they sent a scope in to find the blood clot, it had disappeared and they never found it. While this was a wonderful miracle, I still have fears of this reoccurring. She suffers from scleroderma and is already a very fragile woman.

   With both of my parents having a wide array of medical history, I have always been exposed to the medical field. As I transitioned from middle school to high school and eventually going into college, I already knew my degree would be focused in medicine. Looking at my academic history my first few years of college were not my most proudest. My attention wasn’t where it needed to be, especially during classes my freshman year. I knew I wanted to study medicine, but I couldn’t quite figure out what direct path I wanted to take and my grades suffered from this confusion and frustration. I began researching different medical specialties and I came across physician assistant. As I researched further and realized how much can be accomplished and how wide the scope of practice goes with being a PA was, I knew I had finally found it, as there was so much and so many different medical and mental health topics I wanted to explore! As you can see from my more recent years in academia my grades improved. I repeated classes to not only refresh my memory, but to gain a better understanding than my previous attempts in the past where I didn’t give my best self. I also took classes such as substance abuse & dependence and family communication, to name a few, to help guide patients and families onto a path of healing and understanding of these topics, as I wish someone had done for me and my family. As you can also see, a degree I pursued and completed was Respiratory Care. I wanted to obtain this degree because it was something I felt would help me become a stronger physician assistant. After witnessing my father in the ICU being on ventilators multiple times and my mothers blood clot in her heart, I wanted to learn more about the cardiopulmonary system and the machines I saw so many times in the ICU. Carrying this understanding into my career as a physician assistant will make me that much stronger in my practice for my community and patients and I will be a better asset to my medical team.

   The many years I have been pursing my degrees have also led me to have different types of medical experience. Being a CNA I witnessed many levels of patient care and I myself learned the care, compassion, and patience that goes into caring for patients. Seeing the PAs in the facility just further solidified my desire to become one. They have the benefit of working together with fellow PAs, nurses, and MDs to address and assess the best form of care for the patients. They are also greatly focused on the patient connections and spending quality time listening to their concerns. I felt this was such a desirable position to be in because it allowed for collaboration to any extent, and a focus on patient care without neglecting the human connection.

   My current position as a tissue recovery technician has made me really think about the position the donors were in before their passing. I have seen many different forms of death ranging from cardiac arrest to overdose to suicide. With these different types of medical or mental health conditions I always wonder what was being done for them or what could have been different. During the process of recovering grafts however, I have learned and been able to understand anatomy at a different level than before. Being able to have this position has taught me a new respect for someone passing, but also thought’s of what could be better implemented in the field. I look forward to carrying all I have learned and the passion I have for being a physician assistant into my community, and to be the best team player I can be to my fellow colleagues.

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3. James says

   June 29, 2023 at 9:42 am

   My journey began in 2015 when I joined the Coast Guard, serving as a search and rescue crewmember and technician in the MH-60 Jayhawk. I was able to deliver excellent care, and with such dedicated and compassionate healthcare professionals, my personal and professional aspirations have been ignited with a fervor that drives me toward a career as a physician assistant (PA). The unwavering commitment and exceptional care demonstrated by my doctors have left a permanent impact on me, instilling a deep passion for making a meaningful difference in the lives of others. Inspired by their clinical expertise, unwavering compassion and dedication, I stand poised to embark on this noble journey, armed with the resolve to provide exemplary healthcare, advocate for patients, and contribute to the well-being of individuals and communities.
   Those who left an indelible mark on me were my childhood pediatrician and my close-knit PAs. They provided unwavering guidance as I navigated the emotional struggles of a challenging relationship with my family and growing up. I was fortunate to shadow each of them during school; their dedication and compassion inspired me to pursue a career where I could make a similar impact. Witnessing their professionalism and high standards has shaped my values and work ethic. The patient-centered approach they demonstrated has taught me the importance of empathy, active listening, and providing compassionate care. I carried these skills over as a camp counselor, which only solidified my desire to help future generations.
   In 2021, after five years of service, I was honorably discharged from the Coast Guard. Seeking new opportunities, I relocated to Oregon with my wife and was fortunate to secure a position at Asante Rogue River Regional Hospital. Working in the hospital environment exposed me to diverse healthcare professionals, each contributing to patient care uniquely.
   During my time in Kodiak, I had the privilege of shadowing active-duty lieutenant commander PAs who possessed an extensive scope of practice due to the remote nature of the island. Flying alongside PAs to portions of Kodiak to do health and welfare checks during COVID allowed me to interact and provide care with them. Their ability to adapt, make critical decisions, and provide comprehensive care in challenging circumstances left a profound impression on me.
   I have always been captivated by the thrill of search and rescue missions in high-pressure situations, even in the most challenging weather conditions. Hoisting a rescue swimmer in thirty-foot waves and thirty-knot winds to a small fishing vessel has led me to a position of responsibility, courage, and intuition. Coast Guard aviation taught me that no one man makes a crew, and everybody must do their part and be accountable. These experiences have fueled my desire to become a PA by being someone who will ensure that individuals are better off when they leave me. Scratching this surface by working at Hospice of Kodiak and as a volunteer firefighter in rural Alaska wasn’t enough. When an emergent trauma case rushes into the OR, I’m eager to be the one by the table, helping as necessary and making an impact. I am driven by the opportunity to provide compassionate and expert care to our future generations. I aim to heal their physical ailments and show them humanity, kindness, and genuine respect.
   I am fortunate to coach football at Crater High School, and by witnessing what these young men and women can do, our future is bright in many ways. In a position brand new to me, I learned how to be their coach, friend, cheerleader, mentor, and someone they could relate to. The physician assistants taught me the dynamics of a healthy and happy lifestyle and that life has its ups and downs where you must push on. Ensuring all these athletes had education was a priority and, for some, the only way to get out of their current situation. As a team and family, we adopted the term Ubuntu into our lives; it means I am who I am because of who we are. Pushing each other every day in every way will make you better and, in turn, improve us on the field and off.
   Through the combined influence of dedicated healthcare professionals, a supportive coach, and my experience as an anesthesia tech and veteran, I have been shaped into a determined, compassionate, disciplined, and resilient individual. These experiences have ignited my passion for medicine and instilled in me a deep commitment to profoundly impacting individuals’ lives. I am prepared to embark on the rigorous journey of PA school with a solid foundation in healthcare, firm discipline, and a heart of service. I am dedicated to becoming an exceptional PA who is eager to acquire the necessary skills, knowledge, and expertise to address diverse healthcare needs and contribute positively to the field. As a future physician assistant, I embrace the opportunity to provide comprehensive and compassionate care with gratitude and enthusiasm.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     July 1, 2023 at 6:09 pm

     James,
     First of all, thank you for your service.
     I think your focus on teamwork and collaboration shows one of the reasons that the PA role appeals to you. With that in mind, I love what you wrote about your family and team motto Ubuntu. You may want to consider bringing that idea to your introduction and then refer back to it in your conclusion.

     I suggest elaborating on some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained throughout your different roles. You want to show how they have prepared you to take the next step in your journey.

     Also, you also may want to elaborate on a patient care story that shows your ability to think critically while under pressure.

     Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.

     I wish you good luck, James.

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4. Kat says

   June 27, 2023 at 8:00 pm

   When I was a senior in high school and a sophomore in college, my mother was suddenly diagnosed with a brain tumor and hydrocephalus, which caused trouble walking, memory issues, and severe headaches. Unexpectedly, the person that had provided for our family was unable to care for herself. I shortened my course load to the minimum that I needed to graduate high school but still be enrolled in college since I was in the running start program so that I could help my dad care for my mother and help run the household. Since I was in college at this time, I was able to arrange my coursework in a way that I was home 2 days of the school week, and my dad was home the other 3 days. Through many hospital stays with my mother, I was introduced to the position of a Certified Nursing Assistant, who participated in her care, along with many other health professionals. I had wanted to work in healthcare for as long as I could remember, and the position of a CNA was my opportunity to enter the medical field and start exploring the many roles and positions that were available. While my friends were out enjoying their senior year, I was at home taking care of my mom and was responsible for household duties such as getting groceries, cleaning, and doing laundry. My dad and I took shifts sleeping in bed with her so whichever one of us didn’t have school or work in the morning could get up with her throughout the night to use the bathroom, as she was a fall risk, and had fallen multiple times during this time. My family’s primary care physician is the one who took the initiative after my mom had been in the hospital twice and helped us to get to the right specialists and ultimately, a diagnosis. This showed me how important and impactful family medicine can be on patients’ health and their families. During this journey with my mom, I went to all of her appointments with her and a lot of them were with a physician assistant in neurosurgery. Seeing the impact that they were able to make on my mom and her treatment
   After spending four years of undergrad with the plan to go to medical school, I compared the differences between a physician and a physician assistant and decided that being a physician assistant would better suit my lifestyle in terms of work life balance.
   Recently I felt like I needed to make a change as far as my patient care experience since it was solely in nursing homes and I had felt like I was getting burnt out from the stress of short staffing. After a break from working, I have had the opportunity to work as a medical assistant in a dermatology office which has major differences from what I was used to. I went from residents who depended on me for many aspects of their care and activities of daily living, to now doctors that depend on me to tend to their patients. I have had the opportunity to see many different diseases and treatments which has furthered my belief that I belong in primary care because I will have the opportunity to manage patients that I will get to know as my community but also have the stimulation of seeing so many different ailments and treating them every day. Working in a doctors office alongside doctors, physician assistants, and nurse practitioners has furthered my reasoning for wanting to be a physician assistant because I have witnessed how physician assistants can diagnose, treat, and manage patients which would complete the circle of patient care for me. From my experience working at multiple senior living communities as a Certified Nursing Assistant, I have found the position very rewarding, but I know that I want a position that would allow me to participate in patient care at a higher level. I take every shift I work as an opportunity for me to learn, connect with each patient, and enhance my patient care skills. I have always valued the importance of teamwork. Whether it’s my coworkers or supervisors, I approach every situation as part of a team, supporting and assisting one another throughout the day. This collaborative effort is another reason I choose PA, I believe it allows for a better environment with mutual respect, effective communication, and continuous learning.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 28, 2023 at 7:51 pm

     Kat,
     You sound like you have served your family selflessly over all these years, and I trust that you will be a compassionate and effective provider.
     I suggest condensing where you can so you have room to add in a few more elements of your journey.
     You do a good job describing what appeals to you about the profession. With that said, I would leave out the comments about work/life balance as this can be perceived as self-serving.
     If you have any shadowing experience, describe that. Was there an interaction that solidified your decision to pursue the PA path?
     Also, I suggest including a patient care story that shows you in action providing care while connecting with a patient on a personal level. You want to show some of the clinical skills you have gained, as well as reveal how they have prepared you to take the next step on your journey.
     For your conclusion, I would tie back to your introduction in some way and reiterate your desire to have increased responsibility for your patients’ care.
     I wish you good luck, Kat.

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5. Holly Smith says

   June 27, 2023 at 1:13 pm

   As a little girl, my favorite game was “doctor’s office” with my siblings. Everything from
   charting on notepads to performing surgery on my dolls. The reason I loved playing medicine was due to
   my growing interest of the subject and also the real world experiences I encountered along the way. In
   fact, one of my earliest memories of a Physician Assistant (PA) was as a child. I was taken to the ER for
   sutures for a cut on my hand that occurred while doing dishes. It was a PA who repaired my laceration.
   He was so kind, calmed me down, and made me feel taken care of.  I loved going to the doctor’s office
   for annual visits, sick visits, and even vaccines.  I loved trying to understand how my body worked and
   how I was growing and changing every day. 
   I further came to know about the physician assistant profession from  my pre-medical advisor
   during my first year of college. As we went over healthcare jobs, she explained the role of a  PA and
   described them as caring, compassionate leaders, as well as how important they were to meet the demands
   of accessible care. As I reflected back to my ER experience with a PA, this sparked my interest in the
   profession as I felt it aligned with my personal qualities of compassion, care, leadership, and service.
   Throughout my undergraduate career and post- baccalaureate, my goal was to explore the medical field to
   learn as much as I could about the PA profession. 
   Through countless hours of working and volunteering as a medical assistant (MA) in multiple
   specialties, my passion for continuous learning and goal of providing great patient care has only increased
   over time. One of my favorite experiences as a MA in orthotics was working with providers and patients
   to come up with a plan for correcting head shapes in babies who had torticollis, plagiocephaly, or
   brachycephaly. These patients were infants- one years old, so being able to collaborate effective treatment
   plans with parents was crucial. By being a part of this teamwork dynamic, I observed the positive
   outcomes of providing optimal patient care. This served as an example for how I want to provide care as a
   future PA, and I am eager to be a part of a healthcare team truly dedicated to their patients.
   As an MA, I have had the opportunity to gain experience in family medicine, and shadow and
   work directly for PA-C, Hillary. I observed Hillary demonstrate quality care and genuine interest in
   patients' well-being. In one instance, a patient was frustrated with chronic symptoms and was anxious to
   find a diagnosis. Hillary ordered imaging and lab tests, and quickly found the cause, and both parties
   agreed to an appropriate treatment plan. In this instance and many other interactions, I recognized that 
   PAs have the innate ability to be compassionate with patients, are effective communicators, professional
   leaders, and show great commitment to their patients. Not only are they advocates for their patients, but
   advocates for the healthcare team and the career. .
   My biggest draw to the PA profession is their role in helping increase access to quality care in
   underserved populations and areas. My dad grew up in a rural community with little access to care until
   he was 18. In one instance, he was flown to Utah from his town to receive care for a football injury. From
   this and the examples I’ve seen professionally,  I want to provide care for my local rural communities as a
   PA. I reached out to my local medical school and joined their rural outreach clinic team, and  have
   learned so much from the patients that we see. For example, I had a patient who did not speak English and
   was uninsured, and was worried she was diabetic due to symptoms such as frequent urination, thirst, and
   dizziness. Through collaboration with the medical students, a PA, an interpreter, and the lab, we were
   able to help this patient, work up her symptoms, and develop a treatment plan that she was able to afford.
   I often think about this patient and how many more are out there that need care just like she did, but lack
   the resources to accessible healthcare. My goal as a PA is to increase this access, advocating for patients
   who are in need of quality, individualized care.
   Over the last four years, I have learned more about medicine and specifically about my passion
   for it. Medicine is always changing, evolving, and improving.. This is true of the PA profession as well. I
   want to be a PA to have the privilege of using advanced medical knowledge and clinical skills to provide
   optimal patient care and increase accessibility for patients in need of healthcare.  I will use my skills of
   leadership, compassion, teamwork, and perseverance to serve others and ultimately strive to better our
   communities. I believe this happens by one positive patient encounter at a time. Establishing and
   maintaining relationships with my patients will be the forefront of my future practice.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 28, 2023 at 7:35 pm

     Holly,
     You do a great job of revealing how you came to discover the PA profession as well as describing what appeals to you about the role.
     I suggest elaborating on some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained through your work experience. You want to show how your different roles have prepared you to take the next step toward a rigorous PA program.
     I wish you good luck in the process, Holly.

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6. Mia says

   June 27, 2023 at 8:02 am

   Death can be defined as the end of life within an organism. At 11-years old, I would have never thought I would have to process the concept of death and accept that might be my fate due to my ailing health. It began with a stomachache Friday night which I brushed off as no big deal. By Saturday, my stomachache became worse and was now accompanied by a fever, chills, and nausea. When Sunday morning came around, I lay on my bed in excruciating pain unable to move or talk. I got enough strength to yell for my mother and she came rushing into my room. She carried me to the car and drove me straight to the hospital. As we arrived at the emergency room I was immediately taken back and various medical staff came rushing into my room yelling orders, asking me a great deal of questions and assuring me that they would do everything to make me feel better. The next thing I know, I am being told I need to have emergency surgery because my appendix ruptured.
   When I woke up from surgery, I was taken to the PICU where I was hooked up to a plethora of wires and machines. It was here that my mother told me I had a serious infection due to my appendix. After a few weeks in the PICU, my health was not getting any better and the doctor told my mother to prepare for the worst. One night, my mother sat down beside me and told me I had fought hard enough, and it was okay to let go if I no longer had the strength to keep going. It was very hard for me to process that I could die at any moment and a million thoughts came flooding into my mind. I proceeded to think about all the things I was given the chance to do and everything I would not be able to experience in life. I vowed to myself that if I made a full recovery, I would do anything to help others who were in similar situations to myself. After two and a half months and various surgeries later, I was finally discharged. This experience gave me a new perspective on life and made me very passionate about the medical field because of the compassion, care and respect I received from the medical staff during my most vulnerable moments. It was this experience that inspired me to become a physician assistant.
   After completing my undergraduate education, I was fortunate enough to be given the opportunity to work as a medical assistant at a specialized otolaryngology clinic. I have been able to work alongside many amazing medical professionals including physician assistants and meet so many patients from various backgrounds. Here I have observed how the PA’s can work independently or come together as a team and discuss the best treatment for a patient. Being able to observe how a PA interacts with patients has shown me how this role requires a lot of compassion, communication, active listening, and empathy. During my time as a medical assistant and volunteer phlebotomist, I have learned that many patients often need someone to talk to. They want to know that their concerns are being heard and understood. As a medical assistant, I am the first medical professional that the patient meets so it is important that I set the correct tone and assure them that they will receive the care they deserve. Many of our new patients often express to us that they have gone years without a resolution to their symptoms or were never given proper education about their condition and the possible treatments. It is such a rewarding feeling when patients express to me how happy they are with the care they have received and how we have changed their life in only a few visits.
   As a first-generation college graduate that has come from a low-income community, I often felt that the odds were always against me, so I struggled a lot during my undergraduate career. I was afraid to ask for help, I frequently felt that I was not as smart as my peers and imposter syndrome fueled my doubtfulness in myself. I had felt like my dream of becoming a physician assistant was simply just that, a dream. It took me some time to realize that the only person responsible for my success was myself. I knew I wanted to be a role model to others who come from similar backgrounds, so I decided to make changes. I began asking for help, changing my study habits, and working on my time management. Whenever I feel discouraged about becoming a PA, I often think back to 11-year-old me and how my life could have ended so quickly. It serves as reminder to myself that I was given a second chance at life for a reason. Working alongside various physician assistants is what drives me to be able to deliver the same care and compassion to my own patients one day. As a future PA, I hope to serve as an advocate, mentor, and educator for all patients and especially those that come from low-income or medically underserved communities.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 28, 2023 at 7:28 pm

     Mia,
     What an ordeal. I’m so glad that you’re okay.
     You are a good storyteller and do a great job of capturing the reader’s attention immediately. With that said, I would condense where you can throughout your essay.
     You describe how you want to make patients feel at ease. I suggest including a brief patient care story that shows you in action providing care while also connecting on a personal level.
     Also, if you have any shadowing experience, I describe that. What about the interactions you witnessed solidified your decision to take the PA route specifically?
     I would also elaborate on some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you gained throughout your work experience.
     Remember that should you want more help, we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Mia.

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7. Cha says

   June 22, 2023 at 8:36 pm

   As a paraoptometric for over six years, I have been fortunate to work with a team of professionals that have deepened my value for a patient forward philosophy. I have personally witnessed such high standards of comprehensive eye care that I felt compelled to pursue more education to expand on the passion I have developed in serving others in a medical capacity. I have loved my job because of all my daily patient interactions, and I feel it is time for me to take the next steps forward in providing a deeper level of care than my current role.
   My understanding of quality primary care began during the years I cared for my grandmother after her struggles managing diabetes on her own led to the amputation of her toes. To better manage her medical situation, we relied heavily on the guidance of her primary care provider and associated professionals during this time which consisted of wound care, physical therapy, and diligent treatment planning. Thankfully this resulted in the avoidance of any further amputations, and I saw firsthand how a variety of medical providers improved my grandmother’s quality of life during her final years. Due to this experience, I have naturally become the most engaged with our patients that also struggle with diabetes and the negative ophthalmic effects it can cause. It has helped me remain a constant advocate on the importance of proper communication between providers (most of which are physician assistants) even when the diagnosis is something that is as prevalent as diabetic retinopathy.
   What draws me most to applying to a physician assistant program is the emphasis many mission statements have on better serving underserved populations. My background as a foster child has made me profoundly aware of how local services may have fallen short in my mother’s struggle to obtain the proper resources for her mental health that impacted on her ability to provide a home for her two children. More currently, my employment at two distinct locations differing economically in their surrounding communities has shown me the dissimilarity between health care access among patients due to financial and social circumstances. Through international travel I have realized that access to local health resources is considered a privilege among those living in remote areas of the world where the nearest medical clinics could be over an hour away.
   I want to be a physician assistant because through my personal and professional experiences I truly appreciate the need this role fills within communities to better serve its population. Providing more access to patient care services is not only a national issue but a global one that I believe directly affects the well-being of any given society. As I continue to expand my medical exposure, my interests in health care have evolved beyond the duties of my current position and I wish to put myself in a career that allows me to provide more care for any community I find myself in. I have been honored to assist an amazing team of optometrists but as my interests have grown towards more of a primary care patient focus, I wish to aim for a profession that not only aligns with this goal but also maintains an emphasis on better serving underserved populations.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 24, 2023 at 4:10 pm

     Cha,
     Your passion to assist and elevate patients shines throughout your essay.
     I suggest adding in some more elements that show how your experiences have prepared you for a rigorous PA school program. Include some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained throughout your role as a paraoptometric.
     Also, I would include a patient care story that spotlights some of the qualities that will make you an exceptional PA. You want to show yourself connecting on a personal level while also providing care.
     Additionally, if you have any shadowing experience, include that. What about the PA’s interactions confirmed your decision? You already touched on expanding care to underserved communities. So, here you may want to mention how PAs possess the ability and time to connect with patients on a more personal level.
     Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Cha.

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8. Taylor Lynn Zajdowicz says

   June 21, 2023 at 12:41 pm

   One snowy day in 2010, I awoke that morning with full intentions of enjoying the beautiful white wonderland. After begging my parents for a playdate with a friend, they agreed. We bundled up and headed to the best sledding spot in town. After a few times down the main hill, we decided to try a new smaller hill. The very first time we went down, at the very bottom, I hit a snow-covered manhole cover that sent me flying and ultimately landing on my tailbone. It was painful but as the adrenaline rushed, I continued on. Later on that night, I developed severe abdominal pain that left me very ill. Immediately my father knew something was wrong and rushed me to the closest Children’s hospital. When I arrived, they ordered a CT of my abdomen and diagnosed me with Appendicitis. My appendix had ruptured and I was becoming septic. The physician relayed that it was a good thing I got here when I did due to the severity of my illness. I underwent an emergency appendectomy and had a PICC line placed, where I was on antibiotics for many months after. I was no stranger to medical facilities and was in and out of the hospital as a child but it was not until this unforeseen situation that I became extremely grateful to all healthcare professionals and the astounding amount of knowledge they hold. I was also thankful for my father, who was a firefighter, where he would come home after every shift to share some of the most memorable and compelling stories. He was no stranger to saving lives and with that, I had an amazing role model to look up to in life. This combination of events throughout my childhood created my intense passion for medicine. Throughout my educational career, I was not quite sure what I wanted to do, but knew I wanted to work in healthcare. In my freshman year of college, I began researching different entry-level positions and acquired a position as an Emergency Medicine scribe at one of our local hospitals. This opportunity was daunting to me at first as it was my first official job but became extremely rewarding. My responsibilities as a scribe allowed me to work directly with physicians and physician assistants, where I went with them to see each and every patient. They relayed physical examination findings, differential diagnoses and orders for me to input into the patient encounter note. It was also during this time that I learned about the Physician Assistant profession and their contribution to the field of medicine. Observing their interactions with each patient and their involvement in patient care fascinated me. As I was brand new to this environment, I asked numerous questions, researched many new medical terms, to which it paid off as I started to understand the processes for various complaints and diagnoses. I found myself immersed in a continuous learning environment, where it did not feel like a “job.” I worked all throughout the Covid-19 pandemic while maintaining the status of a full-time college student. I quickly found myself learning and applying new skills such as effective time-management and exceptional organization to balance my busy schedule, which I can use for the rest of my life. My experience as a Scribe taught me so several exciting things, but I still felt like I was missing something. I recognized that I wanted to be in the action, instead of just observing, as I tend to learn best that way. Shortly after this realization, I applied and became a Medical Assistant at a large multi-specialty Orthopedic practice. I learned and developed many advanced skills such as administering injections, casting and splinting, removing staples and sutures and assisting with minor in-office procedures. This opportunity allowed me to create a bond with a Physician Assistant, where I became knowledgeable about the role, responsibilities and expectations of the profession. As a Medical Assistant, I observed the relationship between the Physician Assistant and their supervising Physician. I have always thrived in environments where I am given the opportunity to collaborate with others while also being independent. I believe the skills I have learned throughout my previous healthcare experience have prepared me to be successful in my next chapter as a Physician Assistant. Being compassionate, empathetic and understanding are only some of the traits I learned to be most important in the aspect of patient care in healthcare. Patients must be willing to trust you as their provider so it is imperative that you create an environment that eliminates any ideas of judgement or negative emotion. In my future as a PA, I desire to work with underserved communities and create a space that allows patients to feel understood and heard. I will work diligently to ensure that patients are educated and provided with all possible available resources and options for their treatment plans. With the motivation, drive and strong medical background I possess, I am eager to make a difference as a Physician Assistant.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 22, 2023 at 7:23 pm

     Taylor Lynn,
     You are off to a good start. I suggest adding in a patient care story that shows you in action providing care of some kind. This could be from your work as a medical assistant or even during the Covid pandemic. Here, you want to reveal yourself in action providing clinical care of some kind while connecting with a patient on a personal level. You may need to condense throughout your essay to make room for this story, but ideally it will highlight some of the skills that will make you a compassionate and effective PA.
     Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
     I wish you good luck.

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9. Emily Garcia says

   June 21, 2023 at 10:51 am

   Healthcare and its availability in our country like many others is often debated, revised, but most crucially is underfunded. Quality of care is greatly impacted by an array of sociocultural factors. In my most impressionable years I became very acquainted with community clinics as they were the only source of care we had in our area. Often, I noted provider rushing in and out of exam rooms without giving my mother’s health concerns the time of day. Later, I realized many clinics while being the only source of healthcare for many families like my own are typically understaffed and overwhelmed, which made it all too difficult to also understand what a 6-year-old was trying to translate for her mother. This is the brutal reality for many, they often go untreated due to being embarrassed of certain conditions or feeling as if no one truly cares. Such events and the treatment or lack thereof my mother received were the initial events that propelled me into pursuing a role in which I could serve a role in aiding individuals similarly affected.
   Like many other first generation Latin children, I was responsible for translating for all my family members at a very young age. As a high schooler I began volunteering as an aide at Wake Forest Health Comprehensive Cancer Center on various units and spending most of my time on the mammography unit. During my time at the medical center, I had the pleasure of serving many roles, the most impactful was that of being a nurse aid. In that position I was lucky to form relationships with many patients in our clinic, on the flipside when we focused on non-English speaking patients, it was always heart wrenching having to deliver imaging results that often-needed further testing. Often, I found myself thinking about my mom and seeing her in the elderly patients that we treated. Being able to experience this side of medicine helped me understand that the career was not isolated to only to treating patient as I had witnessed in our community clinics. Nor was it only comprised of delivering good news but allowed me to see that by playing a role in which you to deliver catastrophic news makes you as a provider a vital part in the experience and course of treatment for said patient. It allowed me to discover a humanistic side of medicine and emphasized that a good provider needs to have a strong grip on empathy.
   To fully grasp the role of a PA I began working in my current position as a medical assistant in dermatology. In this position I have observed how each one of providers tackle patient care. Having first-hand experience of the consequences that come with the lack of adequate health care, my desire to be a provider was fortified when I met an elderly man visiting from Mexico. He was referred to our clinic for a blistering rash he had been experiencing for some time without any relief. He stated to have been evaluated by multiple providers, however coming from a destitute area he fell a victim of the of poor and limited health care and therefore had no choice but to endure excruciating pain with each blister that developed. He was quickly diagnosed with one of the worst cases of Bullous Pemphigoid our practice had ever seen. He was admitted to the hospital and started on treatment immediately. He had been experiencing signs and symptoms for more than a year prior to experiencing eruptions. Experiencing such a life-threatening condition was a consequence from the lack of care and education that many individuals like himself experience day to day in underserved communities. I was lucky enough to follow his improvement at each emotion filled follow up. This experience motivated me further into wanting to do more for affected communities such as his and taught me that medicine is more than cerebral and requires strong communication, collaboration, and awareness to provide good patient care.
   With each experience I have placed my education and career goals at the forefront of my journey, always circling back to what started it all, my mom, and the desire to help patients in positions like hers. These were the deciding factors in me pursing a role as a physician assistant. I believe most specialties create an environment where there is a healthy work life balance. Allowing me to continue to advocate for patients while also focusing on my family and caring for them. Having the flexibility amongst specialties as a PA allows me to gain more knowledge and insights strengthening my ability to meet the constant changes, we face in health care. I would also be able to work autonomously and in collaboration to educate, diagnose, and treat all patients.
   My experiences have sealed my aspiration to become a PA, but the passion stem from the many patients I have encountered over the years and will encounter in my future. I want nothing more than to become a provider that will continuously advocate for their patients and those in my surrounding communities.

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   • Whitney Prosperi says

     June 22, 2023 at 7:01 pm

     Emily,
     Your desire to elevate patients is woven throughout your essay.
     I suggest elaborating on how you discovered the PA role. Also, if you have any shadowing experience, describe that. Was there an interaction between PA/patient or PA/supervising physician that solidified your decision?
     Also, I would elaborate on the clinical knowledge and skills you have gained as a medical assistant and through any other jobs you have had.
     Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
     I wish you good luck, Emily.

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10. Hannah says

    June 21, 2023 at 5:24 am

    I was seventeen when I first found it. Dread took over me as my fingers settled on the hard lump beneath my skin. I was seventeen and alone, trying to decide what to do, and wishing I could undiscover the tumor in my breast. “Is it possible to have breast cancer at seventeen?” According to the Internet, it was. I spent too many days stewing in fear until I told my mom. Before I knew it, there we were anxiously waiting in the hospital for an ultrasound of the tumor. Thankfully, the ultrasound was quick. When the doctor came to discuss the images with us, she explained that the tumor wasn’t anything to be concerned about. She suspected it to be a tubular adenoma, or a benign tumor that sometimes develops in girls my age. However, to be sure the tumor was benign, a biopsy was needed. The doctor asked if I knew what a biopsy was. I said no. She said that biopsies were done to collect tumor cells and determine if they were cancerous. Easier said than done. I was outright anxious on the day of the procedure. I didn’t know what to expect. It wasn’t until the physician assistant (PA) entered the room that I began to relax. She introduced herself and the rest of her care team, and explained every part of the procedure in words I understood. I immediately felt at ease.

    At the start of the biopsy, the PA gave me her hand and let me squeeze as hard as I needed to. Meanwhile, she told stories and made the whole room smile. She asked me questions about school and my plans after graduation, and even checked on my mom to include her in the process. She did all of this without risking efficiency at aiding the other healthcare staff during the procedure. She was my hero that day, and I was in awe of how she helped her team while also helping me. Because of her, I knew I didn’t have to carry the weight of the tumor alone. She gave me and my mom the relief we needed in a time of uncertainty while remaining an exceptional provider.

    Her influence on me opened my eyes to the field of medicine, and in college, I tried to get involved in healthcare in any way possible. One summer, I worked as a nurse assistant at a senior living facility. While clocking in one day, I was told that one of the residents on my unit had contracted C. difficile. His condition worsened every day, and my heart ached for him. Myself and my nurse supervisors tried to create a plan to help him recover. The LPNs and RNs administered his medication, and I assisted with feeding, incontinence care, and room cleaning. I brought him his meals and favorite snacks, and talked with him for a few extra minutes every day. Slowly, he improved. Seeing him bounce back made me feel proud of myself and the care staff I assisted, and it made me aware of how my patient depended on our cooperation and support. Caring for him was strenuous, but rewarding. It reminded me of how I once depended on the attentiveness of the PA who cared for me. It was this connection that made me certain that I needed to pursue medicine.

    Shadowing PAs was what solidified my desire to become one myself. While shadowing a PA during an open heart surgery, I watched her take extra time to tend to the patient and his family. She reassured the patient that he was in good hands, walked him and his family through the procedure, and gave his hand a gentle squeeze back in the operating room (OR). My biopsy isn’t at all comparable to open heart surgery, but the care I received from a PA when I needed it was so clearly mirrored by the care of the PA I shadowed. I fell in love with how evident these PAs made their care to their patients, but what I loved most about the PA profession was that it didn’t end there.

    In the OR, the PA and her healthcare collaborators provided care to the patient that exceeded expectations. In doing so, they also supported each other through superior communication and encouragement. The support taking place in the OR that day was what allowed for such a smooth surgery, and it is this type of collaboration that makes the PA profession especially attractive to me. By serving as adjuncts to doctors, PAs increase the quality of care that patients receive. I experienced this first hand with the PA who assisted during my biopsy. She gave me strength and regarded me so highly, and I know now that her ability to do so was what made me value the experience. As a PA, I would work to emulate this quality because I also remember how uplifting it was to assist my nurse supervisors and prioritize my patient at the senior living facility. As I continue to pursue the PA profession, I will make it my priority to remember these positive experiences and use them as inspiration. What I have learned in my pursuit is that I not only desire to become an efficient collaborator with a healthcare team in the future, but I want to do so for the purpose of always providing the best care possible to any future patients of mine.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 22, 2023 at 6:51 pm

      Hannah,
      I think I reviewed your essay before, and if so, we typically provide comments one time.
      With that said, I’m so glad you’re okay. Your introductory story does a beautiful job explaining how you began your journey on the PA path.
      I suggest elaborating on the clinical skills and knowledge you have gained in your different roles. You want to show how you are prepared to begin a rigorous PA program.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
      Good luck to you, Hannah.

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11. Claire says

    June 20, 2023 at 10:01 am

    My sister suffers from a rare genetic disorder called Phelan McDermid Syndrome which causes intellectual and developmental delay in addition to epilepsy. On the day of her first brain surgery, my mom had a worried look as she explained to me that my sister would be in the hospital for several weeks. This expression quickly faded when my family was taken back to my sister’s recovery room. I saw the fear disappear from my mom’s face as the providers explained that the surgery had gone well and she was expected to make a full recovery. This experience along with caring for my disabled sister sparked my initial interest in the healthcare field. I am excited to inform and reassure patients and their families about their conditions as a physician assistant (PA), the way my sister’s healthcare team did for my family.

    As my sister’s condition became more manageable, my granny’s Alzheimer’s began to worsen. The first time I truly noticed her illness was when she and I went grocery shopping together for the first time. I recognized how it took her longer to process the concept of retracting the seatbelt and the specific steps it took to get out of the car. She was also not as physically robust as I recalled. She ambulated much slower and refused to use any assistive devices. Once we entered the store, she could not remember if she had gotten an item off her list, even after she had crossed it off. I had to alter how I grocery shopped to assist my granny through the process without her becoming overwhelmed and upset. What was a simple and mundane task to me became a methodical stepwise process my granny, and I experienced together. As my granny’s independence continued to decline, most routine tasks became incomprehensible, causing her to be more reliant on the aid of my parents and me. My involvement in caring for my sister and granny illustrated the value of teamwork and individualized caregiving that I am eager to continue to uphold as a PA.

    In high school, I took an EMT certification course to expand my medical experiences where. I translated my caregiving experiences into more advanced hands-on skills. During one of my ride-outs on the ambulance, we responded to a call for an 18-month-old who had a febrile seizure. When we arrived, I was able to console the nervous parents by reassuring them that his vitals were back to normal and explaining what caused the seizure in a way they understood. I recognized my role had changed as I was now the one comforting the worried family. Direct patient care experiences and learning the foundations of medicine solidified my desire for a career in healthcare.

    I was first introduced to the PA profession at a career fair in college. After further research, I fell in love with the profession as it allows for a level of autonomy in treating patients while valuing teamwork with other providers. The ability to change specialties appeals to me as I enjoy being challenged and learning new skills. I have had the privilege of shadowing a primary care PA, Mr. Carswell, which allowed me to see how PAs work interdependently with a team of providers. I witnessed his collaboration with other healthcare professionals and his ability to serve as a leader in the clinic. I observed him taking the time to educate patients on their illnesses and support them emotionally to bridge the gap between patients and medical professionals. I am excited to pursue a career where I can practice these qualities to improve patient care.

    I currently work as a medical assistant for an orthopedic surgeon, which has taught me how to be efficient and thorough in a fast-paced environment while still making personable connections with patients. During each visit, I take time to converse with patients about their hobbies and their life outside of their injuries. I have received positive feedback that my reflective listening has negated some of the anxiety that comes with an orthopedic injury. By working as a medical assistant, I have gained insight into being an essential healthcare team member by providing high-quality care, which I will carry into my career as a PA.

    In my current position, I am grateful to be able to improve patient care to a small degree of what I will do as a PA. Although my first significant exposure to medicine was scary for my family and me, I have gained valuable qualities from my personal and professional experiences. I am eager to provide the same quality care the way my sister and granny were and be the one to educate patients and their families on their illnesses. I am privileged to have a calling to a profession that will allow me to do such. With a career as a PA, I know my day will always be rewarding. I am excited to continue to work as a team with other healthcare providers while holding greater autonomy than in my current position. I will use the knowledge and traits I have acquired from my past experiences to share my kindness, care, and compassion as a PA.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 22, 2023 at 6:28 pm

      Claire,
      Your desire to assist and elevate people shines throughout your essay.
      Also, you do a good job describing what appeals to you about the PA profession.
      I suggest elaborating on some of the clinical knowledge and skills you have picked up through your different roles. You want to show how these positions have prepared you to take the next step along the PA path.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
      I wish you good luck, Claire.

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12. Katy Wangsness says

    June 16, 2023 at 11:19 am

    It was an exceptionally warm day for the beginning of March in Upstate New York. We were outside practicing lacrosse in shorts and t-shirts. It was a day like any other—until it wasn’t. I was setting up for a 1v1, planted on my right foot to change direction, and heard a “pop” so loud I could have sworn my teammates could hear. On March 13, 2020 I found out that our season was over and we were being sent home for the semester. 15 minutes later my athletic trainer brought me down to his office and told me the news I was dreading to hear: I tore my ACL. My lacrosse and college career came to a screeching halt in a matter of days. I went home to Syracuse and was seen the next day by a doctor and a PA. I could sense the tension and chaos in the orthopedic office due to the spread of Covid-19, but my providers continued to give me their undivided attention and care. They managed to squeeze in my ACL reconstruction on the last day before they postponed elective surgeries for what ended up being months.

    Throughout the long nine month recovery, I spent a lot of time with my surgeon and PA. I was intrigued by their teamwork and how they fed off of each other for ideas and feedback. I gained a lot of respect for medical professionals during that time period because I am positive they had way bigger things to worry about than my healing progress, but they never made me feel that way. With a lot of time spent with my PA, it solidified my goal to become one. I always knew I wanted to work in medicine. Interestingly enough, I observed an ACL reconstruction for my senior project in high school exactly one year before my own surgery with the same PA who worked on my knee. I expressed my interest in becoming a PA and without hesitation he told me I could come shadow him whenever I want.

    I shadowed Mr. Burnett (PA) several times both in the clinic and in the operating room. I quickly fell in love with sports medicine. Since I have been an athlete my whole life, it didn’t come as a surprise to me. Although I am drawn to sports medicine right now, it is very possible that what I am interested in now will deviate over the course of my career. One of the most attractive things about the profession is its versatility and the opportunity to explore various specialities. This freedom to change course based on my interests and family life is refreshing to have in a career.

    I have two friends who started working as EMTs in high school. Through hearing their stories and asking them questions about the job I quickly realized that it was something I was interested in doing. The idea of dealing with various different medical emergencies and interacting with the community was very appealing to me. Little did I know how much I would gain from this experience. So much of my knowledge didn’t come from the EMT course, instead it was from real-life situations, being forced to work under pressure, and talking to patients. I have learned how to interact with people of all ages, races, and backgrounds. I have been exposed to areas with poor and unsafe living conditions not even 15 minutes away from my own home. It has been a very rewarding experience to provide care and reassurance to patients who are scared and vulnerable. I have learned that I like working with other people to bounce ideas off of each other. The paramedics I worked with are my mentors and I continue to learn from them on every single call.

    In July 2022 I went on a call for a possible broken arm on a 12 year old girl. She was on an obstacle course and fell, landing on her left arm. When we arrived she was surrounded by at least 10 people, and was in a tremendous amount of pain considering her forearm was at about a 90 degree angle. I had most of the spectators back away from her and held her other hand to calm her down while the paramedic checked for circulatory, motor, and sensory function of her fingers. At the time I felt unhelpful, since she ultimately needed surgery to set the bones and there wasn’t much else for us to do. Fast forward to May 2023 and I was substituting for a PE teacher when I realized one of the names on my class list was the girl with the broken arm. I pulled her aside and told her that I was with her that day and took her to the hospital. She remembered who I was and showed me her scars from surgery. She thanked me for calming her down because she was really scared and everyone was crowding her. I realized then that while I felt unhelpful that day, the girl remembered how I held her hand and calmed her down. Throughout my experiences as an EMT I have learned that it is not about the treatments or medications that are given, it is how you treat the patient that leaves the biggest impact. I treat all patients with compassion, kindness, and patience. These skills will be paramount in my professional career in order for me to give my patients the best possible care.

    My past experiences have set me up for a successful career as a physician assistant. To be able to practice multiple specialties, work on a team, and follow through with patient care from start to finish will allow me to be an impactful provider.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 19, 2023 at 4:57 pm

      Katy,
      I am so glad you were able to receive that surgery before elective procedures were halted. What a stressful time.
      You do a good job revealing how you discovered the PA role.
      I suggest providing more detail regarding your shadowing experience. Was there a moment that solidified your decision to pursue the PA path?
      Also, include some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained to show how your jobs have prepared you to take the next step.
      Lastly, in your conclusion I would tie back to your introduction in a more direct way.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Katy.

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13. Emily L.. says

    June 15, 2023 at 4:01 pm

    It all began with constant migraines until one day, I noticed a dense sac protruding out of my nose and felt immense discomfort. My mother rushed me to the hospital where doctors were unsure how to proceed. I was quite terrified, as my 13 year old mind considered the possibility that this would stay in my nose forever. Doctors drained it, but days later it returned. I went to a specialist who used a slim telescope for a better look at my sinus. This was painful as I was alert while a long telescope went up my nose and deep into my maxillary sinus. The exam revealed a large rapidly growing polyp extending from my sinus down my nasal cavity and even my throat. Surgery was imminent. The polyp was successfully extracted but to my disappointment, at my 6 month follow up the polyp had grown back, requiring 5 subsequent surgeries. I was diagnosed with Samter’s triad. Doctors were astonished by the aggressiveness of my case and presented it at conferences. This was the most overwhelming and scary experience of my life. The Physician Assistant (PA) that was on my case provided me with high quality medical care, and emotional support. She took time to educate me on what was happening and what to anticipate. Her compassion made a lasting impression on me. It was the sum of my interactions with this PA that made me realize that not only did I want to become a PA, I wanted to make a difference in the lives of others in a similar way she did in mine.
    I was inspired to contribute to my community and the medical field to bridge gaps of health disparities. When volunteering at a local elementary school, I observed children whose circumstances affected their access to healthcare. My father, a young Italian immigrant, grew up in similar circumstances without access to basic medical care. When he acquired an ear infection it went untreated and led to deafness, an avoidable lifelong condition that occurred due to health disparities and a lack of patient education. This inspires me to focus on being a positive influence to patients and an advocate for all needs to address barriers in healthcare. Proper communication and effectively educating patients combats health disparities. Ensuring patients have proper transportation to and from medical visits, access to healthy foods, etc., will impact their health and outcomes. Although there are many careers in healthcare, I want to pursue a career as a PA. PAs have lateral mobility allowing lifelong learning. I enjoy being able to constantly learn and the ability to move from different specialities will allow me to compound my learning and obtain a diverse repertoire. I admire the balance and room for growth outside of a clinical environment that PAs have which will enable me to be a devoted healthcare provider in various forms such as teaching future students. Being able to keep myself focused in different ways to ultimately impact patients can prevent future burnout. Being in many extracurriculars while being a working student, I experienced burnout. I was able to recognize this, take a step back to reprioritize and learn effective time management. These experiences have also shown me my fondness of working on a team and dividing responsibilities for the best outcome. I value the autonomy a PA has being able to treat their own patients while also being in a collaborative environment with a supervising physician.
    Handling rigorous schooling and continuation into my career requires discipline. Being a first generation student I have ingrained the same hardworking nature my parents needed to provide for our family. I developed a strong work ethic. Without an experienced parental mentor I had to go this path independently, experiencing setbacks which taught me resilience and dedication. With the relapse of my condition, I had a hard time focusing due to migraines and fatigue which affected my school work and extracurriculars. This continued until the polyp was extracted via another surgery. This tough year does in fact define me by my adaptation skills and strength. My job as a physical therapy aide was valuable as I assisted patients with their treatments and worked alongside physical and occupational therapists. This furthered my interest in patient care and helped me to develop communication skills and confidence. Many patients appreciated me spending the time reviewing their treatment regimens in detail; especially Karen, a knee replacement patient who visited the clinic twice a week. I developed a rapport with her and was fortunate enough to assist her through her recovery. Watching her gain her strength back was rewarding, but the most rewarding part is when Karen said to me that my attentiveness, compassion, and knowledge will make me a great PA one day.
    My health scare turned out to be a blessing in disguise, that inspired me to pursue a career as a PA. I have always been drawn to this field, as it aligns with my interests and goals. With all of my experiences both personal and working, I am confident in my ability to succeed as a PA. My hope is to become a culturally competent PA that can take into account the multiple barriers to health care such as transportation, food security and language to provide comprehensive care to patients.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 15, 2023 at 6:57 pm

      Emily,
      I am thankful that you are okay now.
      Your introduction does a good job of revealing how you discovered the PA profession.
      You also effectively explain what appeals to you about the PA role.
      I suggest condensing throughout your essay so you can elaborate on work experience and clinical skills gained.
      I would also include a description of any shadowing experience you may have had.
      Also, I suggest moving your discussion about grades to the paragraph before your conclusion. This allows you to set up the positive aspects of your essay first.
      Should you want more help, remember that our editors are taking essay submissions. Good luck to you, Emily.

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14. Q says

    June 14, 2023 at 11:43 am

    “Ba, Mẹ, có khỏe không?” Translation: how are you doing today, Mom, Dad? I’m always met with the same look of fascination by whichever doctor or mid-level provider we’re seeing that day. They watch the exchange between myself and my parents, their eyes bouncing back and forth between us like ping pong balls, wishing they had subtitles for half the conversation. I quickly translate questions regarding medical, family, social history, and medications to my parents in Vietnamese and report the answers back to the provider in English in rapid response. At the end of the visit, I’m asked the usual questions: “Where are you from? How long did it take you to learn Vietnamese?” I go into my usual spiel about how I was born and raised in Orlando, I lived my entire life there, and that my parents don’t speak much English so I grew up speaking the language, allowing me to be able to attend their appointments as translator. In fact, it’s become second nature to me. “Giỏi qua.” Good job.

    Ung thư. Lọc thận. The Vietnamese words for “cancer” and “dialysis.” I didn’t know these words before the age of 19, but they quickly became a regular addition to my vocabulary after my mom was diagnosed with end stage renal failure in 2017 and my dad with chronic myeloid leukemia in 2018. My presence at their appointments became imperative as their treatments became more complex. I held my mom’s small, shaking hand while explaining the risks, the benefits, and the consent forms under the fluorescent lights before they rolled her back to the operating room to have her peritoneal dialysis catheter placed. We spent weeks at the clinic learning the process of at-home dialysis like it was a 9-to-5 job. I explained to the oncologist my father’s disdain for his current chemotherapy regimen and how he believes his daily vegetable juice is the reason why his blood count is stable. He responds, “if it works, then keep doing it,” with an amused smile on his face. I repeat back what he said to my father, who nods silently in agreement.

    At the gas station the other day, my eye caught the windshield cleaner and I thought back to when I was 6 years old in the back seat of the car, watching my dad clean the front windshield, knowing it was important to do so but not yet quite understanding why at my young age. For some reason, this moment particular led to a cascade of other memories when my parents were younger and healthier: my mother walking me to my elementary school down the street every morning, giving my father a tall glass of water while he mowed the lawn in the blistering Florida heat, withstanding the more than 20 hour flight to Vietnam to visit family. The transition from being taken care of by my parents to being the one taking care of them truly happened in the blink of an eye. They immigrated to a foreign country where their priority was paying the bills, ensuring food was on the table, and that their children received adequate education. Their focus was not necessarily on their health, which has taken a toll on them in their later years. I am grateful to have an inclination towards healthcare so that I may care for them the way they cared for me.

    It’s quite clear that my parents are a strong force behind why I would like to become a physician assistant. I see a little bit of them in every patient that I encounter. When chronic illness touches your life in such an intimate way, it can be hard not to. I am drawn to becoming a physician assistant because managing my parents’ health has always been a team effort between myself and their healthcare providers. While they see my parents anywhere from monthly to annually, I am the one that maintains their daily regimen. As a scribe and an endoscopy technician, I’ve shared my input with my provider on patient treatment in my own way, such as particular wording for documentation or recommending a tool for foreign body removal or gastrointestinal bleed management. I am most at ease working as a team. I am quick to adapt and fill in voids as needed, and adept at analyzing situations and anticipating the next necessary steps. I’ve honed these skills throughout my career so far and I believe that they will be most useful as a physician assistant when collaborating with physicians for patient care. As a physician assistant, I can help treat and educate patients in order to prolong their youth and strength as much as possible while exercising empathy to make their experience slightly less challenging.

    I’m still struggling to pull my ideas together cohesively, as well as formulate a strong conclusion. I’m short roughly 600 characters I believe so there’s room for improvement.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 15, 2023 at 6:45 pm

      Q,
      You are a great storyteller. Your introduction immediately drew me in while also explaining your desire to assist patients along their own healthcare journeys.
      I suggest condensing and combining your first three paragraphs so that you have room to add more elements to your essay.
      You will want to expand on the details regarding what exactly appeals to you about the PA profession over another type of provider.
      If you have any shadowing experience, describe that. Was there an interaction between PA/supervising physician or PA/patient that solidified your decision? Also, include some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained throughout your work experience.
      I would describe a patient interaction that reveals some of your qualities that will make you a great PA. You want to show yourself in action while also connecting on a personal level.
      Lastly, for your conclusion, I would tie back to your introductory story and reiterate your desire to have a greater role in patient care.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck.

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15. Alexa Y says

    June 13, 2023 at 12:33 pm

    I have a tattoo on my ankle. This upward arrow with three lines through the middle, enclosed in a circle with the roman numerals “MMXIV” represents Memorial Sloan Kettering Hospital and the year 2014. My memories of this year, when both of my parents were treated for cancer, are etched into my mind as permanently as my tattoo.
    It was July, and I was finally reunited with my dad one month after his isolated recovery from a bone marrow transplant. I was shocked at the sight of him: masked and gloved, nearly unrecognizable with his drastic hair and weight loss. I was terrified to hug him, to risk passing on even a simple cold that was capable of killing him now that chemotherapy had decimated his immune system. My family was separated for another two months as my mom became his full-time caretaker. Their return home should have been joyous. Instead, the reunion was bittersweet as that week my mom was diagnosed with stage IV colon cancer.
    At 15 years old, my parents’ diagnoses overwhelmed me with fear. To ease this, I focused on learning about the mechanisms behind cancer and chemotherapy, accompanying my parents to their treatments and asking their oncologists as much as I could. Yet, I became frustrated about my inability to do more to ease my parents’ pain and discomfort as they suffered from debilitating fatigue, nausea, and neuropathy. I found that while I was curious about the why of their illnesses, I was more passionate about understanding how I could help relieve their suffering and improve their quality of life. That same year, I began a three-year research program through the University at Albany, where I studied what interventions could reduce the impact of their disease. I gained an understanding of the relationships between exercise, fatigue levels, and return to work rates and how this impacted breast cancer survivors in my local community. This insight to both my parents’ and my community’s experiences introduced me to medicine, and helped me find purpose and passion for a career in improving health for others.
    I entered college with the goal of having a meaningful impact on the physical and mental well being and quality of life of those in my community through healthcare. To explore different healthcare roles, I interned in the Emergency Department (ED) of a Level 1 Trauma Center. As I collected data in trauma bays, observed fracture reductions, and conversed with doctors about how they determined plans of treatment for patients, I differentiated the role of a Physician Associate (PA) in how they balance being both supportive and autonomous. As I observed PAs assist doctors in procedures and manage their own cases, the team-based collaborative aspect of this relationship stood out to me. My experience in the ED introduced me to the PA profession, and the importance of interprofessional teamwork in medicine. This was one of many meaningful experiences that helped me confirm that the role of a PA is for me.
    After college, I became a clinical research assistant where I gained valuable direct patient experience and developed clinical skills like phlebotomy, medical history taking, and patient education. We work with patients with schizophrenia from our adjoining First Episode Clinic, who are in treatment following their first episode of psychosis. Our participants have complex medical and psychosocial backgrounds, with histories of poverty and homelessness, and a greater likelihood of comorbidities like hypertension and diabetes. Learning from each experience, from drawing blood from a patient with treatment related dyskinesia, to de-escalating a patient’s mental health crisis, my compassionate listening and patience ensures patients feel comfortable and supported. However, I am still limited in my scope to do more than inform participants of hypertension or elevated lab results and recommend they see their primary care provider for further evaluation. Similar to the limitations I felt in caring for my parents, this has pushed me to pursue a career as a PA. As a PA I will have a greater ability to educate patients and provide care and resources to manage these chronic health problems. In my career, I am passionate about impacting patient education and advocacy, and addressing the full biopsychosocial history of patients and any barriers to healthcare they face.
    My tattoo is a permanent reminder of my parents’ resilience, and my eternal gratitude for the incredible providers I have to thank for them still being here today. Their experiences inspired my passion to support patients in reaching their optimal health and quality of life through patient care. Through my own experiences I know that as a PA, I can realize this passion. Applying my skills in compassionate care and scientific inquiry, I am confident these experiences will contribute to my success as a PA, and ultimately in providing the highest quality of care to patients.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 15, 2023 at 6:26 pm

      Alexa,
      I am so thankful that your parents are okay, and I trust that they will be so proud of the compassionate provider you become.
      I suggest adding a patient care story that shows you in action providing clinical care of some kind while also connecting on a personal level. You want to reveal some of the qualities that will make you an effective and empathetic PA.
      If you have any formal shadowing experience, I would also describe that.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Alexa.

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16. Caroline says

    June 13, 2023 at 9:33 am

    Pheochromocytoma. That word rang in my ears for days after my mother had been initially diagnosed. For months, my mother experienced a rise of intense symptoms including tachycardia, tremors, shortness of breath, and episodes of confusion. These countless symptoms appeared out of nowhere and slowly began to take my mother away from me. After multiple visits to the hospital and numerous physicians attributing her symptoms to stress, we were eventually seen by a PA who was the first person to tell my mother, “I believe you, and I am determined to figure out what is causing this.”

    Those words alone brought much relief to us, for we finally had someone on our side—listening to and advocating for my mother. This PA took a more personable approach when caring for my mother and recognized that this specific combination of symptoms could be attributed to a rare neuroendocrine tumor known as a pheochromocytoma. We all cried together as this diagnosis brought light to what was affecting my mother, but it also brought much uncertainty moving forward as treatment options remained obscure. On the drive home from the hospital, all I could think of was how grateful I was for the PA who took a chance and saw my mother’s symptoms as something more. I’ve always held a strong interest in pursuing medicine, but from that moment on, as a junior in high school, I knew that I wanted to pursue a career as a physician assistant.

    For the past six years, my mother has continued to struggle with these symptoms despite being on a plethora of medications. During my freshman year of college, my mother was at her worst with this condition and it truly decreased her quality of life. I was committed to commuting back and forth from campus to my hometown to support my mother which took a negative toll on my own coursework. Moreover, I remained academically motivated and enrolled in advanced science and pre-health courses the following year. Nevertheless, I was determined to provide care for my mother, although, most days I felt an increasing sense of defeat as her condition continued to worsen. During this time, I recognized an internal urge to help others in similar situations as my mother, and I was inspired to volunteer at Michigan Medicine in the oncology department; however, just before this opportunity began, it was quickly withdrawn from me with the rise of the COVID-19 pandemic. I never understood how much passion I had for medicine and healthcare until the opportunities to explore these fields were abruptly taken away. I felt stuck, but above all, I felt a growing desire to help those who were struggling like my mother.

    During the second wave of COVID, I was finally able to secure a job as a patient care technician (PCT) and began doing what I strived to do most—help those who are in their most vulnerable state. The feeling I received from interacting with patients was almost indescribable. I felt a level of fulfillment that I didn’t know was possible, and at the end of every shift, I looked forward to returning to do it all over again. I had the opportunity each week to work with patients and directly improve their lives through clinical interventions which made me more confident than ever in my desire to become a PA.

    As a PCT, I quickly learned how necessary active listening, empathy, and clear communication were to provide personalized care to my patients. I achieved this by creating connections, sharing personal experiences, speaking Polish or Spanish if needed, and providing reassurance. Within my role, I also aimed to promote patient safety, quality care, and to ameliorate the workplace which I encouraged by joining our unit council. My position on the unit council allowed me to bring concerns from both patients and staff to the table and make active changes such as developing new procedures regarding fall prevention, medication confusion, and clustered care. The skills I’ve gained such as working collaboratively with interdisciplinary teams and effectively communicating with and advocating for my patients will be transferable to my future role as a PA. Although this job came with many stressful events, staffing issues, and unexpected incidences, the patients are what kept me showing up every day.

    Witnessing my mother’s struggle with her rare condition and experiencing the challenges of caregiving firsthand has instilled in me a deep sense of empathy for patients and their families. My work as a PCT has further reinforced my belief in the importance of personalized care as I have directly seen how it can make a difference in a patient’s recovery. As I embark on this next phase of my journey, I am committed to being a compassionate advocate for my patients, while also contributing to the larger healthcare community through research, education, and service. I am confident that my experiences, passion, and dedication will enable me to make a meaningful difference as a PA, and I am eager to begin this new chapter in my career.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 15, 2023 at 6:17 pm

      Caroline,
      You do a good job of explaining how you arrived on the journey toward becoming a PA. Additionally, I can sense your passion to help patients just as that PA did for your family.
      I suggest adding more details about what specifically appeals to you about the PA profession over another type of provider. (ability to switch specialties, more time/contact with patients, expanding access to care)
      If you have any shadowing experience, describe that.
      I would also include a patient care story that shows you in action providing care of some kind. You want to show how you connect with patients on a personal level.
      Lastly, you are wise to mention your grades, but I suggest moving these comments to the paragraph before your conclusion.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service. I wish you good luck, Caroline.

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17. Megan Tenney says

    June 11, 2023 at 10:59 am

    I had just assisted with a colposcopy — it was nothing I was unfamiliar with, but I was buzzing with excitement. I was my four year-old self again with a plastic stethoscope slung around my neck, feeling like the real deal. Okay, onto the next patient. In the next room, a nervous young woman laid on the outdated vinyl chair, her legs splayed by the metal stirrups, with a blanket of sanitary paper covering her knees. An older woman, presumably the patient’s mother based on their resemblance, stood above the young girl, a stern look adorned her face. We greeted the couple, but our niceties were cut short by the older woman, “Doctor, we need to know that she’s pure. We need to know she’s a virgin.” My recent feelings of excitement were quickly replaced by a quiet state of shock. Somehow the woman’s abrupt interjections felt so personal and, in that moment, everything seemed to come into focus. It was not my fascination with the complexities of the human body, nor was it just the surge of excitement each time something unique rolled through the ambulance bay. It was the longing to advocate for this young woman who so defeatedly wept in front of me that fueled my passion for becoming a PA. I felt called to be a pillar of strength for individuals, like her, who lacked a voice, or a safe environment in which to use it.

    This call for advocacy is something I have continued to encounter in the healthcare setting. As a volunteer at my local free clinic, I frequently care for patients whose faces tell a similar story to this young woman. They seem timid and uneasy, likely because of the exclusive structure of the current healthcare system, and the sporadicity of their clinic visits that prevent them from building a trusting rapport with their provider. When I first recognized this, I made it my mission, going forward, to make these patients feel seen and cared for, hopefully easing their angst. In taking the time to get to know them, I have been exposed to many beautifully diverse cultures and unique perspectives which allow me to broaden my worldly understanding. This has been such an invaluable opportunity that not only has strengthened my understanding of medicine, but has also expanded my cultural awareness — something that is essential in becoming the empathetic provider that every patient deserves. As a provider, I hope to continue working with and advocating for disadvantaged and underrepresented groups, and I can only hope to make as big an impact on them as they make on me; they have much to teach, and the opportunity to learn is something I hold very dear.

    Learning has always been something I have greatly cherished. As a child, I remember wishing the summers away in anticipation of the following school year. There was something about learning new things that made me feel important; it gave me purpose. As time went on, this passion of mine surely translated to an overly challenging major and, perhaps embarrassingly, a few too many tears shed. However, when asked why I had subjected myself to such a strenuous major, my reasoning was always the same: I loved how the new information challenged me and unveiled new, abstract ways of thinking. In a similar way, a PA’s freedom to change specialties enables a potential for boundless growth, which only intensifies the calling I feel towards this profession. In addition, the collaborative dynamic between attending and mid-level provider fosters a constant learning environment and introduces a team-oriented approach to patient care. I have always thrived in a team setting, whether as one of six on the volleyball court or as an EMT working alongside a dedicated clinical staff, and for this reason, I am confident to work with an overseeing physician to create a comprehensive care plan for patients.

    I feel called to be a source of strength and support for those who are at their most vulnerable or simply do not know how to express themselves. I want to be the educator, the realist, the one who introduces transparency to a field that can be so overwhelming. At the very least, I will be the provider that never fails to prioritize the well-being of their patients, because proper individualized healthcare is something that no one should go without. The importance of effective representation is something that I, as a woman, am utterly aware of, which is why I feel called to the women’s health field. This would provide a platform where I could strive to empower women and perhaps rectify societal misconceptions surrounding sexual health, and I believe that my compassion and personability will allow me to do exactly that. There is an outstanding need for patient advocacy within medicine, and if I can even slightly fill that void as a PA, I will feel fulfilled.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 12, 2023 at 12:06 pm

      Megan,
      Your desire to advocate for and assist patients radiates throughout your essay.
      You also do a good job of revealing what appeals to you about the PA profession.
      I suggest condensing where you can throughout your essay so you can add in some more details of your journey.
      I would also spotlight the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained along the way.
      Also, if you have any shadowing experience, include that. Describe an interaction between PA/patient or PA/supervising physician that solidified your decision.
      I wish you good luck, Megan.

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18. Matthew Bruder says

    June 10, 2023 at 9:44 am

    On a mid-September afternoon, the sunlight filtered through the trees as we raced through the forest. The trail pushed our skills to the limit with its sharp turns, rocky obstacles, heart-pounding jumps, and daunting descents. Anticipation hung in the air, with my friends darting in and out of the woods, providing hints of what lay ahead. As the jumps grew larger, so did our adrenaline-fueled excitement. We soared through the air, relying on split-second decisions to keep us on course, all while an uncontrolled grin stretched across my face. The adrenaline intensified as my eyes fixated on the most daring feature I have yet to conquer- a forty-foot road gap. Loading my suspension, I launched myself off the drop, but the memory ends there. Images of dirt and stones flashing by, accompanied by a chilling snap, remain the only fragments of recollection. The remainder of that night played out in the emergency department (ED), as scans and exams were conducted to assess the extent of the internal bleeding. Unfortunately, trips to hospitals are all too frequent for many of my friends and I. Yet, we accept them as a minor consequence part of our passion for the outdoors and extreme sports.

    My journey to becoming a physician assistant (PA) has unfolded in a unique and indirect manner throughout my life. Sports and the outdoors have molded my commitment and determination which has pushed me to where I am today. Injuries, including the one described above, have exposed me to the field of medicine, igniting a deep fascination that set me on course for college.

    Though I had encountered numerous PAs throughout my life, it wasn’t until my second semester of college that I truly grasped the essence of the field. Curious about the vast opportunities that the healthcare field had to offer, I enrolled in Intro to Health Professions, where we explored the vast variety of careers in the medical field. Intrigued by the diverse opportunities to specialize, expanding job market, and the ability to provide comprehensive patient care I dove head first into the Pre-PA track. Knowing I have yet to work in the medical field, I decided to take an accelerated Emergency Medical Technician (EMT).

    After obtaining my EMT certification, I eagerly joined Colfax Search and Rescue, a 911 ambulance service in rural Wisconsin. Working on the frontline of medical emergencies solidified my commitment to the medical field. Providing treatment and support to patients in their most critical moments filled me with an unparalleled sense of accomplishment and passion, similar to the sensations of extreme sports. The alignment of my passions became strikingly apparent. My ability to think clearly and remain composed in high-pressure environments, coupled with my attention to detail and adaptability were demonstrated as an EMT. However, it was during my time in this role that I discovered two of my strongest attributes: compassion and personability. It didn’t take me long to realize that health care encompasses far more than just the administration of treatments. I found that I could establish genuine connections with my patients, ensuring they felt heard and valued beyond the immediate urgency of their situations. This profound connection with my patients became a driving force behind my desire to broaden my scope of practice and pursue a career as a PA.

    As an EMT, I discovered certain aspects that I felt were missing in my role, the ability to diagnose patients and the lack of longevity between my patients and I. However during my shadowing experience, I witnessed firsthand how becoming a PA could fulfill these aspirations. I was truly impressed by the process I observed in the ED, a team working together to gather comprehensive medical history and utilize various resources to uncover the underlying causes of critical situations. The PAs had the advantage of collaborating with each other, nurses, and their supervising physicians, fostering an environment where ideas and diagnoses were shared and refined. Furthermore, the extended time spent with patients in the ED allowed for the development of genuine connections. Compared to the relatively brief interactions during ambulance rides combined with the collaborative problem-solving I had witnessed my desire to become a PA had only been affirmed.

    Throughout my life, I have grown with an intrinsic motivation to assist others and find serenity amidst life’s chaos. I firmly believe becoming a PA will be far for than a career for me, I know it will transform into a passion. I am confident through my unwavering determination, diligence, and reliability reinforced through my pursuits such as climbing, skiing, and mountaineering, will propel me toward success in PA school and the PANCE. While I acknowledge that these endeavors will top the challenges of anything I have faced before, I am assured that the same drive I apply to conquer mountains will not permit me to fail in my future as a PA.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 12, 2023 at 11:56 am

      Matthew,
      Your introduction grabs the reader’s attention immediately while revealing some of the steps that led you to this point.
      I would include some of the clinical skills and medical knowledge you have gained along the way.
      Also, I suggest including a patient care story from your EMT work. You want to show some of those qualities you mention, as well as your ability to connect with patients and also to remain calm in uncertain circumstances.
      Good luck to you, Matthew.

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19. Alisa says

    June 9, 2023 at 5:21 pm

    So sorry, I accidentally posted the wrong revision, ignore my last comment!
    This is about 500 characters over, so I am needing help figuring what to cut or if one section simply doesn’t belong. My patient care experience is on the lower end, but my GPA is very high, so I tried to explain the reason for lack of hours and emphasize my dedication to school. I know my conclusion needs to be stronger as well. Thank you so much for the feedback!!

    Characterized by fun costumes and sweet treats, Halloween is a highlight of many childhoods. This was true for me until fifth grade, when I returned home from a friend’s house to find out that a boy from my school had passed away in a bus accident. We were on the same bus route, but my friends’ parents had picked me up that day. I’ll never forget the feelings of grief, sadness, and questioning that followed. I spent that Halloween and each after wondering what could’ve been done to help him. This question allowed me to determine I wanted to work as a healthcare provider by sixth grade.

    My career choice remained throughout middle and high school, but I didn’t know what path was right for me until I met my college roommate. She declared the same major as me, biology, and planned to attend PA school. Upon hearing this, I researched the profession and fell in love. I talked to my roommate’s cousin, a PA in radiation oncology at Mayo Clinic, about the profession, which only solidified my choice. Working in a fast-paced environment and patient interaction were huge draws for me, but the most appealing factor was the use of teamwork.

    As a Division II volleyball player, teamwork has always been a big part of my life. I have been playing since third grade and picked up basketball, track, and softball through my middle and high school years. Competing while studying biology in college made obtaining healthcare experiences quite difficult; however, playing for a top-25 team while being named captain my junior season, I’ve learned so much from being a member of a team: performing under high stakes, overcoming mental roadblocks, communicating effectively, and being a leader. These experiences are why I love being a part of a team.

    As mentioned, working during the school year was difficult if not impossible due to my heavy course load and rigorous athletics schedule. I put a lot of time into school to obtain a high GPA, and this would’ve suffered had I sacrificed even more time away from coursework. Therefore, I planned to obtain patient care experiences during breaks where I didn’t have coursework. I wanted to obtain a CNA license following my freshman year but waited until the following summer due to COVID. I earned a temporary license and began work in a nursing home. The ability to provide care for residents made me feel a huge sense of accomplishment, and getting a thank-you or compliment became the highlight of my day. I also enjoyed communicating with other nursing staff to adjust care plans for the residents by observing their pain levels, skin conditions, mood, and more.

    Besides playing volleyball in college, I joined the Honors Program to further challenge myself. I picked up minors in chemistry and psychology and added an emphasis in health and medical science to my biology degree. Taking courses from several disciplines allowed me to understand healthcare from several perspectives, and the psychology minor was extremely helpful in understanding patient interactions and mental illnesses. I took courses for the Honors Program focused on racial relations and ethical issues, which helped me understand prevalent issues in healthcare that weren’t touched on in science courses. Learning about racial disparities and common ethical issues in healthcare was difficult, but it prepared me to be a provider and made me determined to help end these problems.

    While COVID altered my plan for patient experience, it opened new doors for me by gifting me an extra year of athletic eligibility. I had planned to forgo this eligibility, but after an unexpected end to my senior season, I decided to lace up my shoes for one more season after graduating with my undergraduate degree. I was accepted into my university’s MBA program with a concentration in healthcare administration and will be taking courses online while working full-time in a healthcare setting. This isn’t a traditional route, but it’s one I’m excited to be a part of.

    When my temporary nurse aide license expired, I began working as a phlebotomist at a local hospital, which felt like a dream come true. Working with outpatients and inpatients in every department, including the ER, has allowed me to experience patient interaction in a variety of settings and specialties. My background in chemistry allowed me to understand what tests were being run with blood samples. Coordinating with other staff such as lab processing, nurses, and physicians is also a large part of my job, which has shown me the importance of professionalism, patient privacy, and doing my job with a smile.

    My shadowing experience so far has been in palliative care, which has given me another unique look at healthcare. Discussing treatment for comfort care as opposed to intensive care is a big difference. I love seeing another side of healthcare and the different interactions involved in this type of care, including working with other PAs, nursing staff, physicians, and social workers. I love the role of the PA in this chain, as they have the most hands-on experience and the most patient interaction. The PA was the individual getting to know the patient to determine the best plan of care, which is what I strive to do.

    My experiences have provided me a unique look at the PA profession but has allowed me to fall even more in love with it. The ability to work as a team with other providers and serve patients in a variety of disciplines has only furthered my belief that a PA is the only career for me.

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    • Whitney Prosperi says

      June 12, 2023 at 11:45 am

      Alisa,
      You do a good job of explaining your journey to get to the PA path. I would add a patient care story from your phlebotomy or nurse aide experience. Show yourself in action providing care while also connecting on a personal level. You want to reveal some of those characteristics that will make you an effective PA.
      For your conclusion, I suggest tying back to your introduction in some way. You want to reiterate your desire to alleviate suffering as well as assist patients.
      Should you want more help, remember that we are taking submissions for our essay revision service.
      Good luck, Alisa.

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20. Aaliyah says

    June 8, 2023 at 4:38 pm

    Social Circle, Ga. “Georgia’s Greatest Little Town,” just 45 minutes east of Atlanta, is a small-town unknown to many. There’s one red light and a joint middle/high school. It’s truly a beautiful quaint place to grow up, off-grid and full of inviting southern charm. Although beautiful, Social Circle has one flaw: it’s a medical desert. The closest hospital is about 20 minutes away in another city, and a trip to the ER varies between 20 minutes to 2 hours. My most eventful memory of experiencing the effects of living in a rural area was my junior year of high school. I was sitting in history class when my friend Dallas suddenly began seizing. As he fell, he cut the side of his eye on a desk and started bleeding. I remember being paralyzed with fear as I watched my friend lie on the floor, seizing and slowly losing blood, silently wishing I could do more. Fear quickly turned to anger as I realized that EMS was called almost immediately after his seizure began and did not arrive until nearly 20 minutes later. This experience and countless others have led me to pursue becoming a physician assistant to address such healthcare disparities.
    As this experience details, I have always been inclined towards compassion and support. These attributes and my kind personality drew me towards a healthcare career. Fortunately, I was enrolled in a healthcare class all four years of high school that allowed me to obtain my CNA and PCT license as a senior, affording me an advanced start in the healthcare field. During my time as a CAN, I learned that to the residents, I was more than just their caregiver. I was their voice, daughter, friend, and whoever else they needed me to be. Though I could not do as much as I would have liked in this role, many told me how much they appreciated my efforts. Being a CNA made me appreciate healthcare at all levels and find creative ways to empathize with patients and the rest of their care team. It was in this role that my love of service and advocacy grew. Most recently, I was employed as a CNA at a psychiatric nursing home, working with residents with behavioral problems. Many patients had no family and were often overlooked because of their behaviors. I understood their struggles and asked to be assigned to their hall, taking on residents that others deemed challenging to care for. Every day the residents were different people. I adjusted to the chaos and still provided the best possible care amid uncertainty by forming connections, educating myself, and providing a listening ear. This commitment to understanding is more than just a job requirement; it’s a standard I hold myself to, no matter the job title. After college, I began working as a rehab tech at a physical therapy clinic. I learned how to problem solve, increased my interpersonal skills, and got the opportunity to shadow surgeons. As a tech, I walked patients through exercises, set up equipment, and occasionally assisted with notes and billing. I enjoyed exploring different sectors of healthcare and witnessing various ways to treat patients. While enjoyable, I felt limited in my role. I was more interested in the medical side and often wanted to dive deeper into the patient’s diagnosis and treatment options. Despite feeling limited, I forged the same connections as a rehab tech that I did as a CNA. A kind smile and attentive conversation often seemed as effective as the therapy.
    Growing up in a rural area exposed me to the dangers a lack of available access to healthcare poses on health outcomes, especially in marginalized communities. Because of this, I am particularly interested in working with underserved and marginalized communities to improve the quality of care and address the social determinants contributing to these disparities. Years of treating patients whose needs are overlooked and living in a medically underserved area have shown me that these experiences are not my own. Mine and countless others experiences have encouraged me to do more and furthered my passion for becoming a physician assistant. To me, being a physician assistant is about more than just helping people. It’s about ensuring my patients are cared for regardless of age, location, or mental health status. Being a voice for the voiceless and finally using mine to make a considerable difference as I have always wanted to. Patients deserve a provider who will listen and advocate for them and their communities, and I am determined to do just that through my work as a physician assistant.

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